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Old 04-11-06, 12:50 AM   #1
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coming for you....

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somethin i did while listening to dmx's- x coming for u (instrumental)

who is affraid of the boy with the S-Z on his chest.
just cus i walk the street with no shirt and no vest.
with a crooked grin and my hat twisted to the side.
crazy enough to kill stupid enough not to hide.
no fear, for the police and less for my enemys.
cus if they fuck with me, the end up on there knees.
and forgeting u ever saw me is the best thing to do.
and forget ur friends and family cus theyll be resting with u.

1,2 ill be coming for u
3,4 better lock ur door.
5,6 better get ur clips.
7,8 ima test ur fate.

1,2 ill be coming for u
3,4 better lock ur door.
5,6 better get ur clips.
7,8 ima test ur fate.



u think u bad cus u say u run the south.
but when i come along all u do is run ur mouth.
dont ever think for a minute i wont shoot at u.
i got so much hate that i just wanna blast u.
cus we in view of the public, ill save it for now.
but when i catch u alone see u later POW POW (gun shot x2)
so ima telling u now, run while u still well.
otherwise fucker ill be seeing ur ass in hell.

1,2 ill be coming for u
3,4 better lock ur door.
5,6 better get ur clips.
7,8 ima test ur fate.

1,2 ill be coming for u
3,4 better lock ur door.
5,6 better get ur clips.
7,8 ima test ur fate.

listen when i speak, cus i could predict ur future kidd.
i dont see threw a cristal ball, just hallow slugs, god forbid.
ill be blowing apart to pieces what used to be ur face.
now u got metal platings with hallow bullets in its place.
just thank god i missed, cus i was aiming for ur head.
if it wasnt for fate, besure that u would be dead.
but dont worry cus ill go round the block once again.
and this time for sure im leaving u for dead.

1,2 ill be coming for u
3,4 better lock ur door.
5,6 better get ur clips.
7,8 ima test ur fate.

1,2 ill be coming for u
3,4 better lock ur door.
5,6 better get ur clips.
7,8 ima test ur fate.

will make longer if liked.
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Old 04-11-06, 04:12 PM   #2
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Old 04-12-06, 10:59 AM   #3
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ok im just bein real here. i wasnt feelin it. it just doesnt flow right in text. everyone will probably interpret the tempo of it differently. now i am of fan of the bang bang type music but it never really belongs in text. not cause people will hate (which they will) but because people will not be able to catch your real thoughts in your peice. but since i am supposed to be leaving feed I will tell u that u need to show a little more complexity in your chorus. simplicity never works in that area. keep at it though man
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Old 04-12-06, 02:06 PM   #4
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I agree with flow not the best I have seen from you, I didn't like the hook
really basic, flow was alright.

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