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04-05-06, 11:15 PM
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Just Breathe
IP: 7328 601D
“Just Breathe” Broken by greed, set the mind free through gesturing obscenities Rolled the green and suggestions of questions obscured Christianity Felt abandoned by God’s presence, blind to his fate, along with learned lessons The second coming of something for nothing expressed his intentions A sentence would sum it all up, when down on his knees Not through prayer, but simple apologies When you feel like you’re being choked, and the grip won’t release Don’t fight it, relax, sit back and just breathe. Isolated by pressure, forced out of the picture by a reaming of lectures Acceptance is presented through the means of a letter Knew the potential, the better the marks, the redder the fire The future brought hope, envisioned riches but death wishes conspired The desire to be great, in the eyes of the beholder with hopes Sparked a stone on a boulder, smoldering the papers wrote So maybe when you feel your lungs fill with smoke Just breathe, go to sleep with the dreams that you broke. Golden with life, molded as archetype in the essence of honor In the presence of Heaven’s present pleasant father Walking on water, the savior of men, their behavior determined what happened next Refused to believe an imaginary friend, betrayal held the sword to their necks Contempt to move next, the man rose to believe for those who won’t And if you’re ready to rise higher, just breathe for the rows that don’t. Daubs - Lauren Tennant, Happy Birthday T. Skillz - Too Ill For You, Son!
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04-06-06, 08:27 AM
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Black Poet
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IP: 860D ECBB
The desire to be great, in the eyes of the beholder with hopes
Sparked a stone on a boulder, smoldering the papers wrote So maybe when you feel you’re lungs fill with smoke Just breathe, go to sleep with the dreams that you broke. ^^ Dam fams that is well dope,.. I really like your style of writting, vocab always on point,.. flow was really good. This was a really deep drop fams keep on coming. Stay up 1~ |
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04-08-06, 10:34 AM
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IP: 355F 01B0
Thanks bro..........
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04-08-06, 02:21 PM
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Bonecrushing Nigga
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IP: 21BF C67A
Nice drop. you really get in your topic when writing these open mics.
Too much to be qouted, all is dope and the imagery was good.
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04-09-06, 07:55 PM
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IP: 67F9 92BC
Thanks man. Somebody PM me if they wanna collab, I've never done one before and I fuckin' wanna.
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04-09-06, 09:38 PM
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New to RV
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IP: 3240 794D
This was a Good read I really like this joint right here
so good talent coming from this cat I see keep at it homie I'll be lookin out for ur ish homie |
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04-10-06, 05:51 PM
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Just searching.
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IP: 8262 49AE
I'll collab with ya. Got AIM, sister?
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04-10-06, 06:47 PM
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IP: 943A 0C0B
nope, just msn.....
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04-10-06, 08:14 PM
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Loyalty proven
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IP: 74E5 D992
yo nice shit man. this is the type of drops that made me get into topicals in the first place. so much raw emotion and vocab. your play on words is great too. I would be down to do a collab wit you man. this is now one of my fav open mic drops ever. i normally would say leave feed on mine but i really enjoyed this so just keep doin what you do.
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04-11-06, 12:33 AM
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-da prophit-
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IP: CF86 0039
really good shit. i was reading it to the beat of dmx's "x is coming for ya" and it pretty much went with that so i was pretty kool lol. anyways i say some multies and i liked the vocab used in this, plus u had some internal rhyming in there so word up. pretty good and i liked the topic 2. somethin a lil nu. word keep it up kidd.
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