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05-11-06, 11:54 PM
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"the sun never came out today"
IP: C031 D8C3
I wake up, leaking so much blood it almost looks like make up
also with amnesia, talking with a preacher while my faith sucks he throws the bible down, & screams hard “God’s vital clown” “pray for his arrival now”, then hits my back till my spinal frowns I go wow, its just cold how anyone could try to wreck me I have been friendly while these people are acting deadly why? I know not, if this is home I cant live on my own block plus when will I find myself? is it after my thigh bones rot? from all the walking I’ve done searching for answers to who I am, which I would do again.. even faster too see I’ve been kicked & bruised, for me there just aint shit to lose dazed and confused, if next to gas I’d remain with a fuse a couple of guys come, tough wise ones; their seeking shit though we have a convo leading into them needing info on who why when.. I realize then I’m ever too shy and why help these 2 guys when I don’t even remember who I am in a cold place with an untold fate, I stand here weary where strangers smirk & danger lurks, all the damn fear tears me its dark and eerie, its so hard to hear me talk to myself in my head, this I said many times as I walk through the hell I cant take this, wont make it. but then a whistle is blown who I am still isn’t known, yet the cause for all this is shown the sun never came out today; then again neither could I locked up in prison.. stuck & stricken plus too weak to survive
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05-11-06, 11:55 PM
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IP: C031 D8C3
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...903#post2740903
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2740905
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05-12-06, 12:04 AM
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IP: 5B30 0354
Drop two links or this will be closed
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05-12-06, 01:40 AM
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IP: C031 D8C3
yeaa. I edited 2 links into my second post.
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05-14-06, 02:56 PM
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-da prophit-
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ive always like ur pieces cus u a very good artist and shit. in this piece u had nice flow. imagery. to me this is a nu topic so good job on that. and u had some internal rhyming and lots of multies. on this piece i would give u 8.5/10 only cus knowing ur skills u could have done some shit differently. and made it longer. but still good piece. keep up the good work.
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