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Old 09-10-06, 12:26 PM   #1
Retrospecktive
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Keystyle + Untouchable +

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Ill ness yess Yall can learn it well
Touch me Im hott u'll burn like hell
Still ill ya must can understand me
I see through ya hoes Like un-stitched panties
Pills neva pop kill 4 eva cops
Neva drop talk talk niggas drop like AWBAK
Stop pop strap..blast caps black mask
Stab crabz that act fast n mack fat's
Why try when Im like the illest since BIG L
Bitch hell,Yall fall like i juss dig wells
Hot like i rule hell handle dis fool well
plus mah phone ring more den da school bell
Aha me man yo im so nice like cool rice im bitchen
or cool like str8 ice up in da kitchens
44 neva grippin listen as I glisten
necklace best bitch lookin like Stitiches and wrist glist

jus bored ~1~
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Old 09-18-06, 12:26 PM   #2
Willa
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well flow wasnt really good from my view idk
to flow it youd have to stretch your syllables
gay how you bold to point out the shit that rhymes idk
lyrically weak


ps wheres your links dumbass dont get yourself banned form the open mic forum
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Old 09-18-06, 04:10 PM   #3
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Old 09-18-06, 04:10 PM   #4
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this needs some work, but theres potential on here nah mean, you need to work on ya flow a little more it was kinda choppy. also just try n make ya word play a little wittier, but keep doin ya thing
holla at my link freal....

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=235120
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