It was like the earth twisted around her or maybe that was my opinion- the formula to love left mixed emotion and me with no dominion-
you know the routine- the love grown between-couldnt flourish with a florist so dreams- appear better then they seam-
tender moans became violent screams- proposal to marriage but she was engaged with material things-
who are you to leave and who am i for you to blame-not enough time spent cause it was the cost of survival in this game-
im yours from 5 to 9 but from 9 to 5- im the reason your still alive-
why this cable is still on- why you got your tampons-but the only finger you lift isnt to help but to tell me to fuck off-
you think i like living like this-i could give a shit- but in survival of the fittest- and a mans path needs a princess-
so from a distance - i fell in love in the instant of an instance- i caused this to happen it was my persistance-
how could it depreciate- what you never saw it there less apreciate-i played the fool while you worked him i was out working late-
im the one who overshadowed your love life- when the whole world made a whore out of my wife- sometimes love comes at a price and i cant afford it- what seams to be the light to heaven can become morbid-
or so it seams our world you painted- violated- when we made love your eve's apple left me tainted-
it's hard for not to call you a slut but what's your decision- could of been mine had i been placed in that position-
wanted to take you back in my arms-but thats the life of depression when you hurt ...you allow others to inflict harm.
past pictures make room for future pain- tattoos of tear drops make my eyes clouds for falling rain-the world without you couldnt be sustained-so i couldnt look you in your eyes just held a head in shame-

this was real coo....your vocab was on point, the usage of words was hella right this was overall a tight piece I diggs this a lot!!!
you showed hella emotion in this piece it was heartfelt I could tell, you must have went through this either recently or it was on your mind...neverthe less good werk I'm uppin this

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not bad.. stuck to topic, vocab was tight.. flow was consistant, not perfect tho...

"im yours from 5 to 9 but from 9 to 5- im the reason your still alive"........ that was straight, I know what that's like...

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nice spit on this one cat,nice lines all round,kept it tight pretty much the whole time,peep my shit in open mic,holla back...mad nice verse man propz,feelin it...

bismillah

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