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Old 04-10-03, 11:50 AM   #1
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Talking The Crusader Is Here...--1st Script--

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Ominous-dominance, I’ve often-taught-against-the promise-of-apocalypse..
The problem-is my-providence I’m fatherless..
Autonomous, Masjid's and their prominent-monuments..
And a flawed-intent to model-its-occupants..
The populous…….has surely altered-its-documents..
Soon to be destroyed with innocuous-offices..
My coffin-is-a-compliment……straining to regain…. my positive-cautiousness..
Knowledge-is-a-confident-consciousness…..an opulent-metropolis-of-consequence..
Knowing God-forgives when rock bottom-hits in a fraudulent-nauseous ness..
I'm lost-in-it, for the sake-of-peace I remain-at-ease..
When the venomous fangs-unleash in sacred-speech..
Condemning fake-beliefs, I blame-the-beast for this age-of-feast that hatred-brings..
Our lives, wrapped in an idea far from love…..and yes, hate-deceives..
Create-relief in blatant-dreams..
Used in a quaint-repeat to sustain-belief in a faithless-seed..
A faceless-me, walking aimlessly to claim-defeat..
Never misinterpret kindness-for-weakness..
In a mindset-that-preaches, a humble, but righteous-completeness..
Enlightened-by-each of, the disciples-in-seek-of .......a crisis-that-meets-us at holiness..
Survival-depletes-us, knowing-this…..bible-beseeches our loneliness….loneliness..

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Old 04-10-03, 11:51 AM   #2
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yo im feeling this god
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Old 04-10-03, 12:12 PM   #3
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Thanks Dawg
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Old 04-10-03, 12:53 PM   #4
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shit was aiight cat,had osme nice multis and a almost constantly steady flow,keep spitting...peep my shit sometime,lookin for comments...

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Old 04-10-03, 03:51 PM   #5
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uPPin This For All You Sleeeeeeeepyyyy Headzzzzzz
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Old 04-10-03, 07:22 PM   #6
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I think the vocab and multis are what make this peice tight, but at the same time they drag it down.

I really like this line:
The populous…….has surely altered-its-documents..
Soon to be destroyed with innocuous-offices..

But some of the other parts of this peice become "cloudy" because of and "overuse" of vocab. Had parts been kept more simple, I think that the overall of your work would've been better and your message more clear.
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Old 04-11-03, 12:13 AM   #7
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It's good...real good...but it's hard to know where you stand...tha bible or tha Masjid...which one?
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Old 04-11-03, 04:55 AM   #8
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see my dads christian..it was just me n my moms we converted like 8 years ago..its sum complicated shit lol
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Old 04-11-03, 05:46 AM   #9
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the topic on this is tight but i gotta admit its hard to follow. ya vocab was heavy and ya flow was pretty tight. id like to hear sumfin like this in audio cos i aint heard too many crusader pieces b4 itd be a nice change.

Anyway cuz RETURN THE FAVOUR AND CHECK MINE BANGKOK BUSINESS aight peace
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Old 04-11-03, 08:35 PM   #10
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i wipe ma fuckin ass wit chure freestyle, cuz u dun even know whut half tha words mean. This is rappin, not taking up yur mutha fuckin english homework. I can't even choose where u stand, just like u can't choose a fuckin religion. I didn't want beef mutha fuckah but u posted an' open mic, so i gotta give ya beef.
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Old 04-11-03, 08:56 PM   #11
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yo saladin...you fuckin wannabe Malcolm... who the fuckz is you nigga ? that was the lamest shit ever!!!! HA HA.... your the rappin version of the bible... nigga go to church and priest
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Old 04-12-03, 07:40 AM   #12
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I smell pussies
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Old 05-05-03, 02:22 PM   #13
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Some parts i was feeling and others I wasn't, overall, it was good.
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Old 05-05-03, 02:37 PM   #14
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LOOOOOL My boy SALADIN i didnt know.....FUCK them Pussy's haters.......MAsha allah dawg Sick Piece am feelin the wordplay....and the contend is sick
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Old 05-05-03, 05:13 PM   #15
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Thanks dunz..

damn this is an old spit lol
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