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Old 05-10-03, 10:38 PM   #1
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I got so many hot 16’s, u’ll see it as child pornography,
And quickly this dick-rider’s gon’ takes to my astronomy/
Your “nothing”, like ur visual’s a noreaga single,
Make your rep topple like jenga, while mine stacks like packs of pringles/
verses “curiously stong” like altoids, heat I pack it, attackin,
eat you from inside like u swallowed termites by accident/
Gone political, kaos? cuz’ truly on the inside you’re a “bush,”
And nothing more or less, test my intelect, and this gat I’ll push/
Your so “phony,” only use for u is for my verizon calls,
Can you hear me now? Sorry f***er, but ebay don’t sell balls/
My “crib” holds women, swimming in money, funny it is,
Cuz yours contains none other than blankets, raddles, bottles, and bibs/
My verses curse you bitch-ass, this’ll make u “think” cuz I drop “wonders,”
Haven’t even rapped yet but your pussy scent’s just been discovered/
Here’s an idea, leave here and never return whether under...
Tough situations or not, next time I’ll take you TWELVE feet under/

Your finished bizzitch, go ahead…


aite uppin for commetns on this piece

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Old 05-10-03, 10:49 PM   #2
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nice verse, I hope it's not a pre write for a battle. I liked your lead off line, but a lot of the verse was filler. The Verizon bar had me rolling until you talked about ebay not selling balls, but the Can you hear me now? shit was priceless.
Nice work, peep my piece(the link is in my sig)
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Old 05-10-03, 11:20 PM   #3
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aite thx understate ill check ures out
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Old 05-10-03, 11:29 PM   #4
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while mine stacks like packs of pringles/tht bit was weak cuse so many peeps on rb have used that
Can you hear me now? Sorry f***er, but ebay don’t sell balls/wack


stop doi so much " " its not a battle, people can get it, that was alrite, but if u keep droppin shit like that all the tiem u cant be ill for fire
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Old 05-11-03, 04:24 PM   #5
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aite i understand thx trill ill try to improve on it

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Old 05-11-03, 09:45 PM   #6
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U need to improove in a few points , , u need too up ur vocab and wordplay
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Old 05-11-03, 10:03 PM   #7
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Damn man, you been telling me about all your posts through aim but you didn't mention this one to me! I thought it was a good read. Pretty funny. I'm not much of a freestyle critic so I can't really give you any pointers but keep on posting. I look forward to more like this if you keep getting better.
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Old 05-11-03, 11:10 PM   #8
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aite thx bash and legendary ill work on it


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Old 05-12-03, 12:29 PM   #9
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There isn't much to say about this piece... seemed like you were trying to battle someone who's not there...

there were no lines that really stood out to me....
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Old 05-12-03, 08:21 PM   #10
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aite i got ya ill improve
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