do you get what it feels like with no Future ahead
all your teachers,parents, and 'freinds' wish u was was dead.
do you get how it feels to have bullets rush ova yea head
everytime you start talking, you regretin what you said.
im always getting suckered into what people are selling
at the end of eveything im always the one rebelling
im anit-people, and im anit you. if being depressed was illegal
id always be getting sued.
im so fucing tred of this dude they call god
if my futures so clear.
how come alli see is the fog
the highleigt of my day was wen i got chased by a dog
the good part about bing me is nothing,
shit im on my own hit list.
i better shut up. before i get the gun in my hand pist.
im the type of person who doesnt wanna die alone
so to make u feel bad ill murder myself...while your on the fone


do u think im KrAzY...or just mentally insane

ayo... rhyme scheme needs work vocab needs mad work complexity of what ur rhymin with needs work, u rhymed god fog dog, but i saw a few things that says u might have some creativity ur just unpracticed

if being depressed was illegal
id always be getting sued,

shit im on my own hit list.
i better shut up. before i get the gun in my hand pist.
im the type of person who doesnt wanna die alone
so to make u feel bad ill murder myself...while your on the fone

^^ those lines show u might have some potential if u get get tha mechanics down
just keep writtin and keep spittin

hit up mine will ya tha mothers day one

Yo another sorrow piece, i cant really relate to this you know
i never had people that would go against me like this u know?
But, like i say those who experienced it feel it the most.
A pointer, would probrably be to key' something that everyone
feels .. just a pointer... keep uppin B!

Thnx everyone who posted

aite this was a decent piece, myself i think it needs flow work but people might think different. Overall it was good.

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