YO!!!!
This is my verse...SLiK.....
I'm callin dis "stranger" fo now....
replies please, when read, say it out loud, it comes out better...

This life can consist of fun and danger, but to my own life, i'm considered a stranger// I dont even know what i'm doin here, but around every corner, i know theres soemthin to fear// As i walk down these empty streets, only think of raps and rhymes, and my own person beats// who knows when a shot will go off, who knows when some mothafucka will calll the cops// I consider this the ghetoo, i gotta get outta here, i'm gonna come lose and let go// fuck my life, fuck everything that goes on around me, and throw me da knife cuz this is how its gotta be// I cant go on like this, i gotta make somethin of myself, i know i can become a rap artist// Feel every word i linger, feel myheart, as if u could touch it wit ur finger// Everday you gotta express yourself, teach those other niggas, not to run dem fuckin mouths// no i cant give up, no i cant let up, even though i'm fuckin fed up// I gotta look in da future and not the past, gotta keep my head up, i gotta smile and laugh// help me, cure me, save me, learn from me, everyday this is how its gotta fuckin be// just help me see this through, just help me and my mothafuckin crew// please dont hate, dont discriminate, just fuckin learn to aprreciate// dont judge me on the outside, take a closer look and see whats inside// youll find my love and my respect, and trust me nigga this is somethin u'll never forget// cuz in this life its consists of fun and danger, to me, i'm my own motha fuckin stranger//....

that shit was ill

That was some tight shit. But say do me a favor.. space your shit out more.. makes it easier to read. Nice Piece OoNnEe

yeah sorry cuz i typed it to a friend on AIM so i copied and pasted it...sorry homies

Real nice man, Try spacin' it out tho But other than that its all good

Hit up my battle in the R.B.B.L against Quil-spit
Out Dawg

I gotta look in da future and not the past, gotta keep my head up, i gotta smile and laugh//

Maaan, this peice was hot. For years now, I've been thinkin about my past and lettin shit bother me, I only found myself in bad positions. Honestly, behind this peice theres truth to alot of people, they just gotta search within it. Good luck, I also wanna say makin this an audio would be a great choice. Props and respect, you deserve it. Peace.

...yea..

keep uppin, and thank you

cmon quit sleepin

tell me what u think...i'm makin this an audio

Ill drop dawg , i liked da whole concept , u stayed on topic ,,,, ill wordplaY............Return da favour http://63.219.149.14/forum/showthre...&threadid=49947