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Old 05-29-03, 03:25 PM   #1
deeni
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first timer but heavy rhymer

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I was that drug dealers dream, a crack feen/
drainin da fluid from my spleen wit pills from white to green/
things don't always look as good as they seem/
matter of fact they aint good at all/
drugs is one of the reasons for my downfall/
tryin to make things better/
i'll do wuteva it takes to get a break in life/
I'm tired of doin wrong before right/
I'm trying to to fight an addiction/
before i go into extinction, like the dinosaurs/
i only got one choice but to voice my opinion/
and to show you life is'nt always good just cuz u didnt grow up in the hood!

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Old 05-29-03, 03:28 PM   #2
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this was decent for ya first time, just work on, everything...
return the favor and peep mines called Not the Average
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Old 05-29-03, 03:46 PM   #3
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not bad man, you need to drop some more into your shit, but keep elevating it'll be good
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Old 05-29-03, 04:13 PM   #4
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Yo that was decent for da first but structure your bars.
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