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05-24-03, 06:20 AM
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IP: 40B2 9385
Hey, I'm new to this site, just wanted to post up simething I wrote some time ago, I'm not really good at poetry but tell me what you think.
nobody hears me nodody sees me invisable to this world no one understands me my whole life is wasted my mind is twisted blind from realitly who am I even suppose to be I can't survive this complicated life my world is caving in on me closing in on me pushing me to the edge I'm crying inside dying inside I wasn't even suppose to live |
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05-24-03, 10:26 AM
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IP: 24A3 0EF0
nice drop. was honest and i was feelin what u were gettin accross. keep writin
Last edited by Nicanda : 05-24-03 at 10:28 AM. |
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05-25-03, 02:28 AM
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IP: C1DA C961
Hey...It was good...It seemed to flow alright...I agree With Nicanda..I was feelin it. Keep it up
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05-25-03, 03:10 PM
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It wasn't bad. This piece came off to me as you writing exactly what was going on in your head. I liked that. Kind of short but you still did good with putting a lot of info in a few words.
blind from realitly who am I even suppose to be I can't survive this complicated life my world is caving in on me closing in on me I feel like that sometimes. Especially the last 2 lines. Nice job. |
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05-27-03, 04:39 AM
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IP: 40B2 9385
Thanks for the feedback everyone I really appreciate it.
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