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waking up in a war zone...
IP: 2C30 9553
i woke up this morning with screams in my ears/
armageddon had landed, my worst fears had come clear/ there was an item on the news that made my face turn grey/ my old hometown....the whole place blown away/ i spent 10 minutes throwing up guts, 10 in tears/ another 20 just mkaing up texts to spend to my peers/ after an hour of sweating, it was safe betting, no-ones replying/ and now i'm getting stressed out of my mind, they must be dying/ i ran from my house, planned to go south, look for survivors/ soldiers on the streets, smoldering tarmac like giant lighters/ dogs running wild, attacking small children, adults crying/ some twirling guns with style, some firing/ the sky is black, scorched from this primed attack/ and as i jump into the car i just might look back/ i havent driven for 2 minutes before my hope starts fading/ the roads been demolished and the traffic is half blazin'/ and i'm half aging, my wills fadin', i dont want to go on/ i cant see how my country could rise and grow strong/ even though we've seen the war coming for so long/ even though we've been banking all bets on those bombs/ i take a walk to the crater, take a look in basin/ force my eyes to focus on this state that i'm facing/ nothing but rubble for a mile, i'm bent double for a while/ breaking down from my grief from the trouble, we're defiled/ |
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IP: 7C9F 2C4F
this aint a fucking pillow.
uppin. |
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^lol... Word
This was a good piece i enjoyed quite alot good wordplay, flow was nice and the content was good -one love- |
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IP: 703B EF0C
really this is ace, really felt it, if iwas sum1 who belieaved more multis lead 2doper pieces id say use more but i aint my fave lines
i spent 10 minutes throwing up guts, 10 in tears/ another 20 just mkaing up texts to spend to my peers/ ^ just heartfelt brillaint flow dawg keep writing! |
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IP: 4577 CD9A
yea that was hot.....propz
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IP: 9BD2 F24F
dat was ight
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IP: A9F4 5CAA
cheers to the first 2 guys and fuck you to the other 2 for not bothering to give a reason for their opinion.
uppin this again. and there are plenty of multis in this MR8. |
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IP: 706D C08A
and again^^
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IP: 891F 5453
ill drop...nice emotions in it.not too strong bu not too weak.. the last four lines were really amazin...props
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IP: 891F 5453
check ma OM out..Imaginary friendand please just dont read it..i need honest feedback lol like yours mine aint a polliow people! lol (good way to describe sleeps dawg)
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IP: 703B EF0C
dont get me wrong but mutis are rhymes in the same lines which there are none last time ig vie u feedback jonny i gave u sum positive ish fuck u
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IP: 2C30 9553
multis are the rhyming of many sylabbles, whether at the end of a line, during a line or from one line to the next.
fuck me? no fuck you. you made an ignorant statment and i corrected you, no need to get all huffy about it. |
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