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06-23-03, 03:52 PM | #1 | ||||
That's Right...I'm White
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I don't get it
IP: 973A EA10
Just the other night, you invited me to your house
put your sibling to bed, then made out on the couch at that time, i loved you more then you could ever know stayed there so long, i missed my favorite show but that didn't matter to me knowing that you were there, beside me holding my hand, never letting go looked at your face, knew something was wrong tho i asked what's wrong, but you said nothing but i knew there was something when i got home, i felt really bad i knew i left you, feeling all sad a few days had gone by, what happend next i would have never of guessed you tell me that you feel smothered i tried so hard, not to be bothered you came right out and said it's OVER now i'll never say, i'll see you tomorrow It's short but i don't care, say what you want |
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06-23-03, 04:00 PM | #2 | |||||||
Tampons are expensive
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IP: EF0A E7B2
this was alright....yeah sometimes poems can be good for venting ya know...this piece is urs and thats how u feel and thats a good thing...
i know u couldve done it better and couldve use more descriptive words and more imagery can be good too...but yeah i like it!>.keep droppin
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<br><br><center>- Shiznit - - Tampons are still expensive - - That's a Fact - </center> |
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06-23-03, 04:14 PM | #3 | ||||
That's Right...I'm White
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IP: 973A EA10
yeh thanks
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06-23-03, 05:43 PM | #4 | ||||
That's Right...I'm White
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IP: F085 1562
keep uppin
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06-24-03, 04:28 PM | #5 | ||||
That's Right...I'm White
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IP: F901 3CCE
come on people
give me some feedback |
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