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06-26-03, 06:55 PM
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Our Wings
IP: C125 9DDD
"Our Wings"
On potent wings we fly to places others can only marginally comprehend Places that exist in the far reaches of fantasy Yet rest on the edges of illusions, lived out in dreams not quite complete This world of unreality calls for us but knows no names Instead reads our minds and intertwines the unconcious thoughts We think about without realizing the boundaries we've crossed For us, this escape on potent wings needs no explanantion it is not a prerequisite for something more It only needs to be what we desire because it's ours......yours and mine Last edited by Syke : 06-26-03 at 09:54 PM. |
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06-26-03, 09:04 PM
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IP: CEF5 716F
eh man..i can't say one real comment cause you know what im gonna say - this was real raw
self explanitory holla |
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06-26-03, 09:46 PM
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Tampons are expensive
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IP: EF0A E7B2
This piece is simple as it is...
although it has well used vocabs..it seemed a little bit weak on the imagery part... but the very simplistic theme of the poem made the piece really nice to read... "It inly needs to be what we desire because it's ours......yours and mine" ^^^ i really think the ending is my best part...like most poems i read... nicely done!
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