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07-21-03, 09:34 PM
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"BodyGaurd"
IP: 6236 079F
This is a different topic I guess...I had written this one a while ago...for a friend...Please tell me what you think...
I will Always Stand up for you I will do whatever I need to do People put you down and kick you around But I will be there to pick you up from the ground I will never leave you empty handed With me, You will never be stranded I won't ever get in your way I'll stick around to help you through your day Standing by to always help you out Never running away and never will i pout Forever watching your back And help you to gain what you lack I will never treat You like trash Always helping you to kick ass Trying not to make you mad But showing you I can be reliable and bad I will send you all of my trust And be there for you when I must I can be your honest true friend Standing by your side till the very end Remember, Life with me will never be hard Because I will forever be your Bodygaurd... Note: I am in the process of recreating this one... |
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07-21-03, 10:09 PM
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Str8 From CopKilla Queens
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IP: 4577 CD9A
umm the title and very last line didnt quite match the mood of the rest of the piece but it was still a worthy peep i must say i have to be critical of its simplicity, simple poems can be good but this left more to be desired its just that essence that u didnt grasp with this one but like i sed a worthy peep i hope u get a lot of good feedback mama, 1luv.
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07-22-03, 01:52 AM
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IP: 399E F0FD
I understand what your saying...Thanks for the feedback...and I'm going to work on this piece a little..Thanks...
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07-27-03, 08:40 PM
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IP: 3BD1 75AB
it was simple i think honestly it could use some work so i cant ait to hear this shit after u recreate it,peace baby girl
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07-27-03, 08:45 PM
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IP: C1DA C961
Thanks for your honesty..Iam gonna work on it some more...but im not sure if it will be any longer..Thanks beau...
peAce |
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07-28-03, 02:10 AM
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Special Ghost To Blow
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IP: 4577 CD9A
I'll stick around to help you through your day
Standing by to always help you out ~Coulda Reworded It~ Other Than That Everything Was Fine... If You Really Are What You Claim To Be Whatever Man Your With Gotta Real Girl / Woman ~Content~ Say It With Me...I Know You Can |
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07-29-03, 11:10 PM
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IP: C1DA C961
Thank you for your feedback...Iappreciate it...
peAce |
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07-30-03, 12:03 AM
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IP: D251 FCF5
it was aight needs some work but sall good nice drop keep elevatin
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07-30-03, 05:55 PM
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IP: 4577 CD9A
Thanks for the feedback...and I said earlier in another post...This one is being worked on...Thanks..
 peAce |
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