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I aint written in a while. This is new. All comments appreciated.
--- Depression washes over me Huge waves, on a high horizon Sheets of water cleansing me A cool, refreshing shower Gravity pulls me in, It embraces me Unwilling to release me, I'm now a victim of this nightmare. The water drows me Pushing me into the sea I hold my breath Trying hard to see It engulfs me and pushes hard Overpowering my senses I can't hold it off It savages me Then it leaves me there, defenceless I drift and rise I'm lighter now I leave my corpse behind My spirit sores With all its might To a place far beyond life. |
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yo thats more of a poem than anything......but as a poem it's aight.....it had alot of symbolic pharases...and metaphors...cuz im sure the shower....thing means more than i says as well as the drowning...... i think ur view of life seems a lil worhtless....im ai right cuz from the sounds of that u sound depresed......
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IP: 24A3 0EF0
yeah i was feelin pretty down when i wrote it. i put it in poetic scriptures too, just tryin to get as much feedback as possible. depression was pretty much the runnin theme.
thanks for ur comments. |
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