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08-18-03, 06:07 PM
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That's Right...I'm White
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Thug 4 life
IP: 6C15 4D51
i remember when i was young,
didn't have to worry bout carryin guns, didn't have to worry bout wathcin my back but now, i got the crew for that always together, chillin and hanging wih the fellas don't take shit from no one, got somehtin to say, tell us we'll fuck you up, won't give you a 2nd glance beat you bad, you won't even stand a chance we don't give a fuck, if your big, small, got a gun or knife we'll still fuck you up, cause we're T4L, thugz 4 life Fight you any where any time, come back, still have time to write a rhyme cause you won't last for very fuckin long fuck u'll be done by the end of this song hey yo, verse 2..... scared now ain't you... ya bitches can't ever pop the thugz cause somehow u'll end up hidding under rugs cause we don't get caught when we kill you bitch and if we do, i really don't give....a shit it'll be worth doin 10 to 50 years in prison so fuck you, it was your decision I'm always gonna be a thug no matter what happens so don't wirry guys, we'll always keep bustin and cappin thugz 4 life peace uppin |
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08-18-03, 06:56 PM
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IP: 19AF 50C1
i dont like thug raps but i like that you did show you have talent work on it and polish it this wasnt bad
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08-18-03, 07:37 PM
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That's Right...I'm White
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IP: 4C1B E283
uppin
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08-19-03, 09:51 AM
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IP: 020A 4147
There was parts I liked more than others. I think you were kinda missin somethin that pulls it all together.
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08-19-03, 01:38 PM
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That's Right...I'm White
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IP: E7E2 6F94
uppin
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08-19-03, 01:48 PM
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IP: 46B7 07B6
it was aight,needs alil improvement but you got tha right ideas and it'll come dawg.
peace |
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08-19-03, 01:52 PM
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Got More Meds Than Pfizer
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IP: C407 EF0F
you do need alot of improvement man, up your vocab... and stay away from thug rap, 'cause you're not a thug.. you live in newbrunswic... come on.. I know newbrunswic isn't even close to gangsta like the population of the whole province is pro'lly 2 million... lol... so yea, advice... VOCAB, WORD-PLAY, FLOW... flow is a simple 4-4 beat for any beat... listen to the snare... and write to that, forget the melody even exists.. if you learn how to catch the snare then work on writing to the melody aswell..
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