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08-27-03, 11:35 PM
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high
IP: 3E33 E55C
i'm high as fuck
too drunk to drive my truck 2 much speed feel as I'll never O.D. never seen so clearly PCP feel so free LSD scared 2 be alive about 2 take a nose dive 2 think this is all a crime watch all tha pigs come outta the hive time to make love 2 my 37 wives need 2 AK-47's lets c how many die it funny that this ain't a lie lets c if i can make a grown man cry guess how many motherfuckers get caught in my drive bys how much crack B4 i get shot in the back it gonna happen like shit after exlax but all I can do is relax |
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08-27-03, 11:58 PM
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IP: 8382 67F7
hmm... let me see
flow was easy to find but just for presentation purposes you should fix it up. The vocab was VERY simple... and my pet peeve is usless number: B4 LSD scared 2 be alive about 2 take a nose dive 2 think this is all a crime watch all tha pigs come outta the hive time to make love 2 my 37 wives being that this is TEXT i am looking to see if the numbers add up or something, so i suggest if you just need to say 'to' then put it in. also when you put 2 i think you mean two which makes no sence in some line 4/10 I know you can do better... hit the books take that how you want |
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