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Desperate and alone
Responces have grown short of my own ......................(drifting into unconscious) Feel like my body is loosing Every breath I take is becoming short Entrapped in a world of illusion Levetating......................................... ..... Glowing white light up ahead Old friends I havent seen in a while Over and over again I keep hearing a voice saying he's Dead |
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Just call me your Savior
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IP: F718 7AAD
ha ha, i liked it cause it has a solemn and hidden feelin in it, although it WAS pretty simple...tha way u put tha dead at tha end is like tha climax BUT it's AT THA END, which can always leave tha reader thinkin...good piece...
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IP: 22ED 1BB0
simple but crude..........it lacked length but it didn't in depth..........what am i sayin......nice drop............................................
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IP: 4577 CD9A
Thanks alot. I know it was simple but I was trying to explain in as minimal of words as I could to explain an overdose................
Thanx again............... PEACE~~~~~~~~~~~~> |
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That's Right...I'm White
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IP: C846 F162
yeh
it was alright, coulda made lines little longer or something but other then that, this piece was tice. Keep droppin peace |
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IP: E772 2D41
short and simple,it sometimes makes a good piece.keep droppin.~1~
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