yo yo here goez i aint knowin if ya'll 50 cent and eminem punkz be feelin rhymez dis dope but if you izz den you in lizuck. tell me whatcha think

i aint gay
call me gay
ya'll gonna pay
how could i be gay?
i got a laday!
fo sheezy
ya'll take it eazy
cold wind be breezy
yo mama really skeezy
girl dont tease me
i kick yo dog
it ate my frog
i hit it with a log
threw tha body in a bog
then i ate your hog
and slaughtered your pig
that big was big
then i smoked a cigg
i hate shoes
that iz covered in booze
i broke a bottle on you head
yo, it bled red
my name aint ted
i'm driver, you a ped
put yo ta bed
where you belong
you girl wear a thong
dont take to long
when ya sing my song
tha other day
got a call from dre
said hey
write me a song, homay
i said 'fo sheez'
he said 'thanx and pleaze'
then i capped him in his knees
stole his car keys


peace

Ok...

You are officially in need of elevation.

You'll find it here if you want to.

This place is a good training ground.

Ya rhyme was elementary and silly but if it meant something to you, good.

That means ya might care enough to learn.

Welcome to RB.

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thought it sounded like a kids poem, leaves alot to be desired
it was just so simple and basic it didn't work at all................peace

read others pick up a few tips on structure and word play etc

lmao pure hilarity..........................................
LMFAO literally......oh this is worth so many laughs.....but i dunno if u intended to be funny.........and if u didnt dude u need some serious help.......if u intended to be funny bah u need more work