Diseased trees droppin very sick leaves...
Like cheatin cards slippin outta sleeves.
My mind's a forest from which I retrieve...
Visions of memories that make me grieve.
Can't forget the past, there's no reprieve...
I wish I could percieve it was all make believe.
Go back in time, never land the fatal cleave...
Never feel the upheave but I'm not that naive...
I couldn't run from this crime if I ran ta Tel Aviv.
It's my own guilty conscience I'm tryin ta relieve...
By spittin these words in this thread I weave.
I'm just sittin here thinkin and tryin ta concieve...
That evil and I were once thick as thieves.

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This was a real nice ...Piece of writin..

U used a real nice and high vocab, combined with a nice flow

A good concept..

Nicely those multi's..

Goos job on that one..

Enjoyable piece,...

Overall a good piece..

I could break down , ..on what u could do better, but its fine the way it is...

Props..

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Fuck you

tight in general i saw no flaw but im sure you figured as much

good job sir, the flow was great!!!
multis were definetly mad and pleantiful
topic was 2 clear for me though...

if you would be so kind
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=87052

yo that was sick needs a bit of work but dam

Thanks much for the feedback, peeps...

Especially the latina lady, gracing my thread with her first post...

(If I wasn't married, I'd swear I was flirting like an herb!)

Much appreciated, all...

Keep em comin.

Peace

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i was really feelin the spit....

my style comes hard with multies...

therfore much respect, tite drop