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Old 10-23-03, 07:12 PM   #1
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[Wk3] The Realist vs Born To Kill

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Verses Due: Friday, October 31st 2003
Voting Ends: Monday, November 3rd 2003

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Old 10-23-03, 11:21 PM   #2
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check in...if its ok
The Extra Mile
Born nice to see you here...if the idea is good with you let me know
 
Old 10-27-03, 09:14 AM   #3
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Back from vacation and checking in...

Thanks much for the spot.

Very appreciated.

The Extra Mile sounds fine...

Friday's due date is cool...

Halloween it is.

Good luck, Realist, my man...

Edit: What's the line limit on SS? Is there one?
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Old 10-27-03, 01:04 PM   #4
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*Will Edit Here With The 3 Required Votes I Need To Drop Links For*

Ill Mental vs T Squared

Feeble vs White Lighting

Casket Match: Hi My Name Is... vs 2Hot2Handle

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Old 10-27-03, 01:06 PM   #5
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The Last Mile by TR

My first influence was well used to this, I watch him from afar
His smooth finesse with words is like quick fingers on a guitar
Never understood how two words could be rhymed as such
I tried my luck, purchased a mic, prewritten was my crutch
I new it was time for my to start jumping my lyrical hurdle
Stepped up to a cypher, I was flowed around like a circle
They told me I had potential, and to calm down when I spit
They all had rap credentials, now my flow had changed a bit
I was so caught up I didn’t ever leave the studio in my home
I spit at all hours of the night, used my cell as a micro phone
In my hunger I even bit off net raps, still hate all my verses
My battles were like set traps, always came out word less
Friday night I went to battle, my mind was ready to manhandle
My enemy was basic, crowds eyes made me start to strangle
Try my hardest and all I do is look like a heavy breather
Why’d this happen to me, why’d I catch this 8 Mile fever
 
Old 10-28-03, 09:19 AM   #6
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My First SS Verse...

Hope ya'll like it...

The Extra Mile

Athletes in marathons don't run an extra mile...
There's a finish line for them so it isn't worthwhile.
If only I knew where my ribbon was stretched...
I'd know how far I'm goin in life and wouldn't be so perplexed.
Elevating means going uphill, that's a harder road ta take...
The downward spiral's easier but at the end there's no brakes.
So my direction's upwards, wearin holes in the soles of my shoes...
Watchin the lucky drive by cuz for some it's easier ta do.
I've seen betta rhymes, but more importantly betta ways of life...
So I'm lookin for that extra mile to provide for baby and wife.
I'm too old ta think I'll 'make it' with these verses I spit...
So I'm stuck workin 8 ta 5, though I know it's not my niche.
Every day I feel some pain cuz I know I was meant for better...
I'm an artist inside, a writer, born to lay down letters.
But stupidity mis-directed me, traded college for semesters in jail...
I started my race at a snail's pace when I coulda enrolled in Yale.
But years have passed and the past is that, reflections with a smile...
But the grin that's within is melancholy cuz now I can't find my extra mile.
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Old 10-28-03, 04:54 PM   #7
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Good Verses From Both..

Breakdown....
Realist:

This was an overall good verse. Your story line was okay...Your Flow was really difficult in a couple places but everyone has troubles with that...It wasn't too bad of a read but I was a little dissapointed. Vocab was okay, but nothing special.
6/10.

BTK:

For your first SS verse this was solid. You encorporated some multi's and took on a solid life story that not so many people can relate too. The struggles were something I could personalize too and see. The Flow was good and didn't have any big noticeable flaws. Vocab needs to come up but that comes with experience in topicals. Good Job. 7.5/10

Vote: BTK
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Old 10-29-03, 06:44 PM   #8
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Ight... not really what i expected....

BTK...better than expected... on 1st try... props...
TR...worse than expected...i've seen the open mics...
i know you could do better

TR...Your story was ok...nothing special tho...
not much caught my eye...i just know you could do better...
i don't think you tried much...cuz this piece wasn't all too great...
but it was decent....the idea just wasn't hittin me...

BTK...well...i hafta say this 1 was more "eye catchin"...
there was some nice flow...meta's...good vocab n shit...
the story was better ths TR's...it was good...pretty good...
I just think you hit the topic better....

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Old 10-30-03, 03:41 PM   #9
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The battles I've voted on...

Calda Merda vs. Fgee
1 vote logged...

White Lightning vs. Feeble Minded
Another vote...

Championship
Chrit vs. Auspicious

Third vote...

Hi My Name Is...vs. TooHotToHandle
4th Vote
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Old 10-31-03, 02:13 PM   #10
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Was Definitly Expectin To See TR To Come Harder
BTK Impressed Me Here..
Didn't Know His Approach On Topicals
But He Upped His Game For It. Impressive

TR.. Ya SHit Seemed Well, Not On Point
Sum Of Your WOrdplay Seemed FOrce
Not Bad, But Not Great

Vote - BTK
 
Old 10-31-03, 10:37 PM   #11
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btk u had a good vocab to go along with
your story, nothing seemed forced

tr some of the lines seemed forced and
the story was jus ok

vote btk
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Old 11-02-03, 10:54 AM   #12
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Yep..
Really no Need to explain It
BTK came with more of a better
approach than did the realist

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Old 11-03-03, 11:11 AM   #13
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5-0 to me...

Props to you, Realist.

Thanks to everyone who threw a vote.

Much appreciated.

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Old 11-04-03, 12:19 AM   #14
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B2K wins.
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