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10-29-03, 03:41 PM | #1 | ||||||
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This Is Also A Soon To Be Audio As Well As Fictional Peace...
World Of Drama Adicts And Shameful Tactics Lives With More Problems Than Complex Mathematics The Fact Is We Get Wrapped Up And Snatched Up In That Material World That Makes Us Inject That Crack Up The Problem Is We Only See, The Fake Lifestyle Of Sitcoms On TV Leads Us To Believe That It's Normal To Do Adult Things As Teens Teachin Our Children To Do Anything To Make The Green Bad Influences, Kids Lose It, Get Too Wrapped Into It Now They Make Acceptance For Every Mistake And Finally Ruin It Get Caught Up In Peer Pressure, Completely Freeze On The Spot Gives In And Next Thing You Know You Gettin Calls From The Cops Sayin Your Child Was Shot, Gang Related Drug Deal Gone Bad After That, How You Think You Would Feel As A Mother Or Dad To Let Your Kid Go Without Any Kind Of Guidance Or Direction Lecturin Could Have Paid Off Instead Of Goin About Problems Without Any Type Of Mention
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10-30-03, 12:26 PM | #2 | ||||||
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uppin for some feedback
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11-01-03, 06:43 PM | #3 | ||||||
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11-01-03, 06:52 PM | #4 | ||||||
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this was a rare piece that i have come across that i read and it really flowed---nice work
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11-01-03, 07:23 PM | #5 | ||||||
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nice drop i was really feeling it...flow was good, vocab was pretty good...structure was good and the content was great...really liked the whole message behind it...nice drop and it left me wishing it was longer...keep dropping son...
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11-01-03, 07:26 PM | #6 | ||||||
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flowed well until the last few lines when t slowed down abit
liked it though good message behind it and flowed well for the most part liked the opener did it welll although the topic was a bit played u put your own stamp on it props |
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11-01-03, 07:28 PM | #7 | ||||||
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Thank You For The Feedback And If Y'all Can Reply To My Other Piece In My Sig... Fictional Peace...
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11-01-03, 08:06 PM | #8 | ||||
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Yeah i liked this piece.....it was a good read i thought.....it flowed pretty well through out it, got sketchy at the end, but still good ont he flow though.....your vocab was nice, nothing wrong there....your structure was nice.....had nice multies.....overall this was a good piece...keep at it.....and keep dropping.
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11-04-03, 02:22 PM | #9 | ||||||
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stick to the text cuz I read some of your shit and if any body dig your style shit then niggas is crazy |
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11-04-03, 02:30 PM | #10 | |||||||
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yeah the flow was aight
a bit short but nice... good vocab, keep droppin |
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