this was a nice piece
I understand......people both young and old become confused and agrivated with the reality of not knowing something.
Uncertaintity follows us everywhere, and once one answer is provided another question surfaces.
i liked this piece, i saw a child surrounded by this uncertaintity, curiosity and wonder if the lack of knowledge will prevent them from growing older, more mature. I think everyone can relate to this in our own little way, b/c we always wonder and it seems as if we always edn up where we started. Let me stop rambling.
this was a nice piece, i enjoyed the concept, the technical aspects were all fine.

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Poetry
Don't Look Into My Eyes Forgotten
Understanding Once Again
"It requires wisdom to understand wisdom:
the music is nothing if the audience is deaf."

Great drop. Sounds like my mind. Its filled with millions of questions, and pretty much all of them cannot be answered. In a way, that is part of life. To live unanswered questions. Always wanting to kno the answers, and searching for them. Sometimes you find the answers, but you are never sure if they are truely the answers or just a figment of your imagination. I liked this. Structure and everything were great. Keep up the good work. Much respect.

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I liked the confusion and emotins in this peice

i have had many of battles like this in my head(alot of times im in a pretty altered state of mind) but it seems odly familiar

pretty nice drop

I thought the last stanza was too cliche.

'feelings escapes'???
^^^other than that technically sound...obviously.

The rest was good, topic universal but you took a very negative stance... even though it doesn't come across that way. It seems ironic that one would write this with such confusion and not enough sense of journey or knowledge...
don't mean to put you down dude, I love your shit, but something here didn't sit right... it might be me and my mindstate or a sense that I'm overwhelmed but it came across as though you wrote it for the sake of writing something.
.wurd.to.writing.though.
keep thinking and you'll find answers...
.peace.

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don't mean to put you down dude, I love your shit, but something here didn't sit right...

i agree, dont worry, i appreciate ur responses, cus ur honest..i wouldn't want someone beatin' around the bush..and u don't..
anyways, i didn't exactly like this either, but ironically this piece relflects my emotions at this point in my life, more "obviously" then any piece i've ever written...

for some reason im questioning things so much that i don't really know what to think anymore...like when i REALLY think about it, i don't see how happiness differs from sadness, i feel like i've just always been sad for some reason..it's realy strange...sry to ramble on...i do'nt even know what im talkin' about right now

thx for all the replies, i appreciate em....

at least your thinking.... that's a good thing.
.wurd.
.keep up the good work.

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A really good piece i liked it alot. Had emotion and all around it's great. Poetry aint bout being good, it's bout expressing ure inner feelings. Keep it up.

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hey yo...just uppin to tell you that i really liked this and to keep writing

^Agreed completely..

Anyway... this piece had a lot of emotion n the flow was good about it... I can relate to the confusion in this.. niice job.

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^^thats what stupid people say... its not about being good but its definately not only about expressing ure inner emotions..
have you ever read a poem?
go draw a picture.

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I think he meant that its about expressing everything like your inner feelings and thoughts. He's right, cause poetry isnt about being good, its about expressing yourself in your writing. Technically, that is why he can say that. I think he just didnt explain himself fully. So dont hate on him.