it was a dark night
mom drunk ready to fight
stepdad came in smellin like beer
u could feel the tension in the air
then right before my eyes it happened
my mom started snappin
then came his fist from the right
words cant describe how i felt that night
he was a marine six foot five
she was a woman 5 foot and barely alive
i held her in my arms untill she lost sight
while he escaped into the night
only to return the next week
only apologies he could speak
so she took him back without a second thought
right then she tied her own knot
he left her there to die
words cant account for the hate I felt inside
so i put a blade to his gut
said what
then i gave him a six inch cut
as i watched him bleed
he began to choke her on her knee
so i hit him in the head with a pool cue
these words aint fictatious "Steve I hate you"
now at long last ill never see him again
but if i do ill start what i began

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Pain is abscence of tolerance
its the emptyness that conqueres the mind body and soul

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