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Yesterday I wasn't hungry, and my girl was in the house
the bills were paid after scracthing crumbs up like a mouse my seed was playing teddy with my momma on her bed at ten i kissed my baby, said goodnight to sleepy head me and my girl kissed and cuddled, told me to sleep coz i'm tir-ed things was nice and quiet in my peaceful little crib but that was yesterday, today its quite different i'm standing in an long line cos my boss fired my ass my girl, she was good- then met a nigga with more cash momma's cussin me, and wants to take nizzel away she bought some lady over and won't listen to what i say my baby, she screaming 'daddy' while their taking her away I can't hire a lawyer, cos this nigga hadn't been paid Now I can see my daughter only one a week the bitch is gone forever, sucking dicks to earn her keep lord take me out this pothole, i don't wanna live this way thats my life. and thats all i have to say |
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You need to leave 3 names or 3 links to peoples feedback or this will get deleted...
But this was ok....it was simple but a decent read....structure was alright, try making the lines the same length though cause you have some small ones in there....flow was alright got off at a few spots though, try adding some multies and internals to that...overall this was ok...keep at it and keep dropping. |
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