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12-15-03, 01:17 AM | #1 | |||||||
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Rewind..
IP: F354 9C29
My tape's playing smoothly
No skips, everything calm and relaxing I'm happy now Because I have you Because I have sumone to love Because I have sumone to love me Then I look to the past All the times I wanted to give up this life Because I thought there was nothing to live for Because I had nothing to look forward to Because you weren't here I don't want to go back to those times I never want to go back to those days And I never want to rewind back to that part in this tape So I broke the stereo. . .
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12-15-03, 11:31 AM | #2 | |||||||
Sharp Perfection.
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IP: 4427 B15C
simple put, but holds a deep message, with lots of emotion.
i could tell you that this coudl be longer, with more explantions, and more detail, but i think the way it is now is perfect for what it is. Theres not much you can say about a piece so short and self explanitory like this, other then i liked it, it and was nicely written. the last line was my fave! ~Tera~ DONT HATE
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12-16-03, 12:32 PM | #3 | ||||||
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IP: 7AFC 236C
it was all right but not complex at all it was simple as 1 2 3
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12-16-03, 04:40 PM | #4 | ||||||
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IP: 0594 A279
I liked it alot. Even though the structure was simple andthe rhyme scheme. You expressed the emotions of this poem well.
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12-16-03, 06:34 PM | #5 | |||||||
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IP: F354 9C29
Thanks alot.. I appreciate the feedback
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12-16-03, 06:36 PM | #6 | |||||||
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yo i thought it was nice
had a sense that u accomplished something then something happened that caused u 2 brake the sterio which was probly something went wrong with yer audio i soppose well good piece nonetheless ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ |
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