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Old 12-15-03, 01:17 AM   #1
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My tape's playing smoothly
No skips, everything calm and relaxing
I'm happy now
Because I have you
Because I have sumone to love
Because I have sumone to love me
Then I look to the past
All the times I wanted to give up this life
Because I thought there was nothing to live for
Because I had nothing to look forward to
Because you weren't here
I don't want to go back to those times
I never want to go back to those days
And I never want to rewind back to that part in this tape
So I broke the stereo. . .
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Old 12-15-03, 11:31 AM   #2
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simple put, but holds a deep message, with lots of emotion.
i could tell you that this coudl be longer, with more explantions, and more detail, but i think the way it is now is perfect for what it is. Theres not much you can say about a piece so short and self explanitory like this, other then i liked it, it and was nicely written. the last line was my fave!

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Old 12-16-03, 12:32 PM   #3
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it was all right but not complex at all it was simple as 1 2 3
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Old 12-16-03, 04:40 PM   #4
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I liked it alot. Even though the structure was simple andthe rhyme scheme. You expressed the emotions of this poem well.
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Thanks alot.. I appreciate the feedback
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Old 12-16-03, 06:36 PM   #6
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yo i thought it was nice
had a sense that u accomplished something
then something happened that caused u 2 brake the sterio
which was probly something went wrong with yer audio i soppose
well good piece nonetheless
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