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04-22-06, 11:22 PM | #1 | ||
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the death of a loved one
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every day is like a step in the past
mutual fellings of love thought to last 3 day's latter comes with a letter of intent your b/f been shot and his life has been spent you look to the heavens ask good why this happened a soldier once loved left behind as the hours of time passes your heart clashes and feels like it's stuck in your throat death isn't a disease there is no antidote i know it's hard to forget your bestfriend hard to see your lovers life come to an end we sit here and try to alter the past for a better future and better life to grasp but nothing can ever heal a broken heart to mend it back together is just a little start i see it like this things happen for a reason god died for our sins and still he is bleeding your b/f last breath has all begun for a reason for god took him back is the change of for seasons a little present that he has left in your woom your b/f will always bee there but your son will come soon never forget but alway remember the birth of your son on that awful december you look into his eyes all you see is his father your man lives in your son so don't cry just don't bother everones life somday comes to an end wether it's your mother or you fathful bofriend |
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04-22-06, 11:22 PM | #2 | ||
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uppin..........uppin............uppin............. uppin............uppin............uppin..........u ppin...........uppin.......uppin.............uppin ...........uppin.........for feedback
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04-23-06, 01:29 AM | #3 | |
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Drop two links or this will be closed
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04-23-06, 02:47 AM | #4 | ||
A Reflection Of The Past
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IP:
you have mad potential, but you were lacking alot of imagery you know? this seemed like a boring lalaby.anyways the emotion was decent actually but un like poetry topicals do not depend a whole bunch on emotion it needs more imagery you know?
so work on that ok.
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