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11-02-03, 02:07 PM | #1 | |
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in need of some serious help!!
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ok i was ok at writing rhymes n shit but then for about half a year i didnt write or record anything cuz i was too busy and now im getting back into it and im horrible..some one please help me out here.
heres a off the dome thing i did a minute ago: I cant take this shit anymore and im about to break// earth shattering confusion im loosen My Mind how much more of this can I take// My lifes at stake, contemplating my own life// A Razor blade to my wrist another tear drop with every slit for everyone who dissed// I cant think because im loosing my self// Faster and faster im falling into space I don’t think this is good for my health// Ide ask you to read my mind and tell me what you think// but you would rather turn the page// sayin im pussy like pink// got me confused an now I cant go to sleep// I need a shrink// Make my problems smaller// Before I go insane and grab my hatred taller// .....yea im that bad..... |
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11-02-03, 02:18 PM | #2 | |
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IP:
first make your lines fit
you have some small lines, and some large lines. Try and keep it all aligned aight. like this: xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx// xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx// xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx// You might have to start re-arranging words to make it fit, but soon it'll come natural |
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11-02-03, 02:19 PM | #3 | |
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IP:
ok, thanx
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11-02-03, 05:12 PM | #4 | |
overseas mc
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IP:
well if you can pop out the long lines and make em rhyme and make sense with the small lines its aight
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11-02-03, 08:14 PM | #5 | |
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IP:
also lose the // at the end of ur lines thats hella played put somin like .... or leave it.. it makes ur lines look better structured and easier to read
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11-03-03, 11:28 AM | #6 | |
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IP:
Yea, like MethodZ sed, try and use differant endings to be more original.
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