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12-08-03, 06:52 PM | #1 | ||
I Am The Light
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13. Brixton (2-1) vs 14. Mental God (3-3)
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topic: historical moment
Due date: dec 12th Voting ends: dec 15th
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12-08-03, 11:16 PM | #2 | |
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checkity check
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12-11-03, 09:47 AM | #3 | |
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check mate
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12-12-03, 06:10 PM | #4 | |
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Look Down At Your Wrist, Your Watch Is Spinning Backwards
Grey Hair Turns To Color, And In Reverse Fly Black Birds Reappearing Buffalo Heards, Back In The Land Before Time Life Goes From Old To Young, Like You're Holding Down Rewind The World Was Refined, No Pollution Was Yet Known The Air And Water Were Clean, With No Holes In The O-Zone And Everything Was Home Grown, When People Had Morals And Kids Werent Getting Shot, Over Silly Turf Quarrels Listen To The Chorals, They Sung Because They Believed They Never Questioned Faith, It Was All They Could Conceive And They Didnt Grieve, Never Was A Tear Wiped On A Sleeve They Percieved Death As A Step, To No Longer Being Niave Then On A Midsummer's Eve, Somebody Questioned Perfection Gathered A Collection, And Then Promised Them Protection All They Had To Do, Was Follow A Few Guide Lines For Life Promised Bliss After Death, But He Had Lied To Minds Alike So They Took A Hike, Over A Desert For Three-Hundered Years Never Questioned His Ambition, Never Did They Shed A Tear They Never Felt Alone Or Fear, Only Felt A Great Hope Even When Life Was Rolling, It Had Been Perched Atop A Slope Started To Slip Away Like Soap, Drowning Like A Sinking Boat Untill The Day, They Had Been Givin What They Asked For They Rushed Into A Belief, When It Really Was A Masked Door They Stepped Through The Opening, Expecting To Find Bliss Wandering For 300 Years, Made People Forget They Exist And Now They Arent Missed, A New World Has Unfolded While There Was No God Present, The World Had Been Molded Nobody Was Scolded, The Earth Took A Leap And Passed Peace Cause Now Instead Of Fair Justice, You Get Beat By Police Violence Increased, People Only Cared For Themselves The Only Place The Bible Is Worth Anything Now, Is On Bookstore Shelfs |
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12-12-03, 07:23 PM | #5 | |
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Opens Door To A Bitter Eerieness...WTF??
streets left empty...as if they were evacuated in all of Tandem I'd pick out the most Tranquil areas but experienced'em Random peace was left Bemused by this overthrow of Bewilderness even tho in life we settle for shit..we still strive for the Best or was this a Test? were somethin trying to Trick or Illusion Us nothing there to see yet I can still feel this Soft but Trivial Buzz was there a major event happening? and i wasn't Invited!! the Queen may have died or a major Superstar Jus Knighted? but i was Blighted by a sudden rush of Anger from a Far turned the next corner to see Broken windows n Cars left Ajar doubtfull Intuition telling me there was Evil scowling the Air suddenly I break into Prayer and tell the Lord "please be Fair" as I uttered my last words there came a Thunder in my Face I held my Body jus Incase coz the Tumor shuck the Place nuttin left on me but just the Standard police Issued Mace it was like cat and mouse yet I dont know whos bein Chased Inbedded in sanctimonial Referals to films like 28 days Later as the hours of Loneliness grew my thoughts began to Cater sick Visions of a world where there was jus me and Myself talkin to myself???!!! shit...thats gotta be bad for my Health just to calm my Nerves I take a few more Prescribed than Usual I always wanted to be Alone but now I'd rather go Commutal Now I seem to be slipping in and out of the Deepest of Sleeps I'm just resting my Eyes coz this silence gives me the Creeps can't feel my face no more and I feel Affect of these Pills a Fascist head's going round and round..much like Wind-Mills Ending up this way..wishes became a Historical Moment Digested see fate took its place Injested..*coughs*..Vital signs Arrested Wishes do come true..sometimes Be Carefull What you Wish For |
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12-12-03, 11:01 PM | #6 | |
A King Missing a Queen...
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Mental God - That was a very nice verse... I was feeling the vocab, subject matter, flow, and the rhyme scheme was pretty good as well. You came with somthing uniqe, I can tell you put some thought into this...
Then On A Midsummer's Eve, Somebody Questioned Perfection Gathered A Collection, And Then Promised Them Protection ^ I was feeling those lines right there, my favorite ^ Nice drop hommie... Phil.M.Up - I liked the vocab, and the metaphores that were in there. The flow and rhyme scheme were pretty basic though. I wasnt feeling where you took the topic that much either. You did have a couple bars in there that really caught my attention... doubtfull Intuition telling me there was Evil scowling the Air suddenly I break into Prayer and tell the Lord "please be Fair" ^ I like it when people bring some religion into the rap ^ Vote - Mental God Conclusion - He just was better all around. Both verses were good, but mental god took this in about every area... Nice drops from both of you though... OUT -High Class a.k.a Confusion
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12-15-03, 02:50 PM | #7 | |
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I Don't Know If I Will Be ABle To Vote Cause I Wont Have DSL Till The 20th, I'm At School Right Now, So I Only Have Like 5 Mins To Check Everything, I WIll Try Tho If I Get Some Time.
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12-15-03, 07:10 PM | #8 | ||
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Both amazing verses
Mental god, your flow was awesome your vocab and structure was great the way you kept the reader involved to this piece was really well done you had a great story line...no flaws in that at all Phil Em Up, you also had a great verse your flow was great and your rhyme scheme was good, i liked your descriptions also very well done Overall I think mental took this, this was close but mental had an impressive verse, that was awesome Vote Mental God Good verses both of you though
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12-15-03, 07:51 PM | #9 | |
wanna play doctor????????
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i really gotta say Mental here...
he just had a better imagry n all in his... i gotta say it everything goes his way handsdown... decent drop from Brix but nothing spetacular... good drop mental |
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12-15-03, 07:55 PM | #10 | ||
Straight Savage.
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I gotta say Ill-Mental got my vote. Phil M. Up is getting consistently better, but there was a whole level of implied deep shit in Mental's lines. Nice battle to the both of you.
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12-15-03, 08:24 PM | #11 | |
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Im glad you guys didn't do the same thing/concept. Made it
intresting to read both verses Mental.. your shit was deep.. ya flow was amazing. i really seen you improve topically.. really dope. the finisher was a good thought provoker.. really good piece Walter.. not bad.. i liked the concept.. although i though you coulda done better with it ya know? dope piece none the less i just felt there was more potential you coulda lived up too v/ Mental God |
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12-16-03, 07:23 AM | #12 | ||
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Great job
Brix - you came w/ a good concept, liked the verse Kept me reading w/out losing my attention.. v.good verse, great stuff...props Metal - Just some real good 'thinking' shit there, Flow was clean and tidy all the way, really deep thought's and some great imagery... i'm giving this to ment because altho both were great drops Ments was just a notch above everything... Props to both V.Mental pz |
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12-16-03, 10:58 AM | #13 | ||
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mental wins closed....
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