[ - Loneliness, Ft.Edicius- ]

Sphere

Sittin in the corner my former visions decive my mind
Submissin for a listen glistens to depict in the lines
Left conflicting at times for people to feel my array
Extremes of feelin youl find means they just walk away
Darkness turns to expression..as i learn a lesson in life
Of departin from stressin n switchin my gun for a knife
Fuck strife it brings isolation….the hinge of the end
On the brink of suffication with no help from a friend
People forced to resolve in a sollution of disolvin away
This shits about diluting ya tears..to live the next day

Edicius

Memories in the dark corners of my mind
a lost soul, without a goal,so hard to find
& realizing reality=exsisting more in dreams
than i real life thats more filled with schemes
Feelings of emptyness,flowding wrong way's
I could pray lay back on my bed and sway
asking for help from above give me back love
But i realised it had nothin to do with holyness
my persistance of excistence is just lonlynes

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all these people so little feedback

fucka sleeper

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uppin

Wow, i'm kind of depressed now.
But it was nice, and short to the point.
It flowed well with you 2 togehter,
thought at times seemed a little choppy.
But wasnt bad enough to ruin the piece
Good usage of vocab, multis yaay
i liked how you both gripped the emotion
thought now like i said, i feel kinda sad

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Retarded people's heads are to big..I'll be back with something just as funny as watching the Special Olympics..don't worry..

^Choppy lmfao ..

Thnx..

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not bad collab
feel what the topic was about and the way you did it
eddy...u need to improve your grammer man,..lol
getting like fuckin nelly n chingy with their right hurr n shit
for reall i thought spheres was slightly better...and more comprehendable
i liked both verses however for what they were
the last two lines of spheres was the best from him
ed...your first two lines were the best imo
props

Sphere, you had average content, and an average flow, but for some reason certain lines of yours struck me as real powerful ..

Fuck strife it brings isolation….the hinge of the end
On the brink of suffication with no help from a friend

^ that was one of the coolest lines in the entire piece. i felt a lot of emotion, and it was a mildly dope read. more originality in your topic might have made it really good.

edicius.

yours really wasn't that good. it seemed rushed, and you lacked in overall emotion because you forced a lot of lines to save the flow which wasn't even that extraordinary in the first place. but ehh, it wasn't too bad, or too good, pretty average. keep writing though. peace

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Ayo nice cipher...

Nice flow and vocab...I don't have any critiques T'is was good...
structure wise on point...

could have written a little more...You both expressed yourselves well..understood where ya was coming from...nice...

would be cool to do a cipher with you two...

Laters...

thanks

keep it commin

2 min key ..

Glad yall love me..

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Agree on the most, ..but not on the forced lines in to save the flow, .. = ) ..thnx..tho

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you did force them bitch don't argue.


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Ayo this was a killer collabo... i was feelin both from start to finish ... flow was on point... ish was there... just what i likes to see from two Text/Mc's.. fa sho dunny

keep doin big thangs...

Caesar On3