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Old 12-23-03, 12:54 AM   #1
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fuck this up

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Now i will give you a flavor that will change your behavior/
you will be beggin down to your knees for a savior/
i should give you a sex disease when i come through while i fuck you/
And go do that to everyone then continue/
i dont wanna see your sorry ass face cause its a disgrace to everyone in any place/
you better not consider fightin back cause youll just suffer/
I will have you all mixed and fucked like a shuffler/
you remind me of a fake ass from the early 90's/
when some bitches made rap look like a joke and was dying/
you wanna take control of that and fuck everything up when it comes through to kill the industry/
You do that then every rappers ass will be history/
i should fuck you up faster than when michael jackson did while kobe was givin the white girl pussy action/
over a chair you were singin ill be there up and down like an elavator then get stuck/
thats when you just fucked all this up/
no reason for lies no reason for this shit ass things to take over/
Faster than ray rays 311 career compared to the other/
your like the source of course cause you cant rap/
you cant stunt or take control because you too weak to handle/
ill burn you up 2hot like a candle/
ill rape your moms and yo moms moms mom/
blow them up like bombs over baghdad/
its like alqaeda came to her and showed them some osama/
while yo mama was bein done i was there peain and havin some fun/
i terrorize you verbally physically and mentally while i fuck your memory/
grab your money steal and hide/
took yo ass through you in the fire and died/
hope you just had a great ride/
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Old 12-23-03, 01:04 AM   #2
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feed back please
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Old 12-23-03, 01:05 AM   #3
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You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get closed, Thanks.
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Old 12-23-03, 01:25 AM   #4
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Old 12-23-03, 02:25 AM   #5
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Yo that was strate son. Do how you do it and it's done how you did it. Bless the mic!
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Old 12-23-03, 11:58 AM   #6
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yey ^ there that was a nice freestyle touch up your structure and your gonna be a good freestyler on this site
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Old 12-23-03, 11:55 PM   #7
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thanks uppin fo mo
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Old 12-24-03, 01:21 PM   #8
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Hey man that was an aiight drop. It flowed so-so. If ya want ta get better though, ya have to add some multies. Just concentrate on one subject and let the pen go to work.

I give this piece a rating of 5/10, which is still a good rating. Also, add some vicious wordplay to this piece....
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Old 12-24-03, 02:57 PM   #9
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That was good. The flow was nice, you need a few more multis to give it a lil more flavor. But overall i was impressed with this. Stay focused and keep it real. 8-10
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Old 12-28-03, 07:52 AM   #10
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i liked it. thought the flow was dope and lyrics was aiight. keep it up
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Old 12-28-03, 08:42 AM   #11
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some nice lines..flow was spot on, only thing i'd develop is vocab..sometimes by making the way you word things more complex, you can bring a whole new light to your freestylin...and throw in some more multis...makes it gel...
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Old 12-29-03, 04:50 PM   #12
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pretty sweet, agree with the vocab thing, sometimes it was a bit predictable, try and liven it up.some surprises.still quite fresh.
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Old 12-29-03, 04:55 PM   #13
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Was pretty cool. I always like to read keystyle, it's better than readin a song. Comes out more interesting. This was. Especially the oart about Micheal Jackson. He he
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Old 12-30-03, 06:51 PM   #14
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i really like it. think it is very good
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