the battles i fight throught my whole life
have remained pontless like a blunt knife

my foes unrelentlessly chase me, i drive my own mind crazy
i try coming back and asking the holy spirit to save me
shit just thinkin of every reocurring moment makes me lazy

i run the streetz of my mind helplessly
not knowin wats at the next turn i might just be a few steps away from insanity
trouble maker since elementary
always tired never resting like i was not meant~to~sleep
a whole decade of my lifes been nuthin but misery
adults wanting respect from me
askin if i need help? the truth is theyre the ones dat need therapy

im wonderin where all my freinds went
they all gone from others mal-intent
im actin like havin no one care bout u posseses no real threat
for those whove ive hurt i only feel remorse and regret
knowin that one day these enemies can help me pay the rent


btw, if ya dont know, my name is brian

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upped

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It was simple. Very rigid. Though seemed 'off hand', cos it stuck with a certain structure in such a way, it tainted the emotion a fair bit. Well, that's how i saw it anyway. Nonetheless, it had a certain amount of something to it. What? I dunno, personal emotion maybe?

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i know it was simple, this was one of my first poems. varentao, i respect wat u do. can u chek out sum of my other poems i think ull find them more enjoyable. thanx

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^Nothing wrong with simplicity. It's good, some of best poetry is simple.

It just needs to be built upon now. For a first piece, it's good for sure. I didn't know it was your first.

Dang all that tude is not needed lol! J/k I aint read it but it sound stupid lol! J/k again it was alright considering my first poem was about a boy named Killers better half.....

umm, thanx? thats feedback. it is appreciated. u keep doin ya thing couse ure pretty good at this poetry stuff.

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how you kno? have you read anything I've written?? I'ts horrible!

i like the way it all 'rhymes'. it very good. you crazy fan. That for sure. You crazy Fan.

this one was different from the rest... in a way shallower....... for a first poem this is thu shyt!!! i shudda wurd frum thu bak so i could read your poetry as you progressed poetically and lyrically!