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Underground Intelligence
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So finally that dictator Saddam has been located then found like me tha instigator seen to be incarserated underground intelligence astounds never hear who we are but we are here never blow up stuck in tha rear for years an then we appear with no fear ready to save the day with verbal not gun spray people are blind and say we lead the unsighted of today astray not me no way i release freedom of speech and for that i've faught in this war of words cease fires saught but enemies still caught mental and physical wrot as a prisoner ready to escape the regime i look my best an stay clean but body is lean coz lack of green so many fiends injecting to satisfy the craving like a leech freedom of speech but addiction leaves you nuthin to teach |
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shaky...
but reasonable key bars were abit too long in the first part....seemed to try n cram too much vocab in the content seemed to go off topic from saddam to something else... alright read..and as akey cant really complain much ![]() about time u wrote sumthing u tit |
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I thought that the bars seemed too long for the rhyme scheme.
You had a decent flow...but the format seemed to make it elongated, if you see what I'm getting at. You had pretty good internal rhyming (the next step would be internal multies, they're super dope) and I appreciated that this wasn't all about saddam, because I was worried after reading the first line. This was a pretty decent keystyle...with some tuning it could be a decent piece.
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