[url=http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?s=&threadid=106211lyrics g, warm up

[url=http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?s=&threadid=106224liba dee, multi madness

[url=http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?s=&threadid=106183west, fears




i watch through my cig smoke, using my eyes,
contemplating susicide, pondering my demise,
but from beyond what lies, death in the skies,
i've had too many tries, at a bleek, failing life,
if offered one more reprise..............
.....would i take it, or again shun evil's diguise,
false hope cries, thinking back about the lies,
i seem to realize, things that shock an surprise,
asking my self.. no replies, my mind denies,
cant do nothin as my pity multiplies......
as i near the end, my cigerette, smoke dies,


nice short, and easy to reply to, so reply!!!

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thought it was quit basic sounding, jus with the way you rhymed it.... but the content was good ...l liked that.... seems like your one depresed kid...lol.....pZ....

lol, i will be if no 1 replys to my open mic!!!!

uppin!!

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uppin for some feedback??????????????????????

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damn y'all is sleepin!!!

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any feedback at all..............................

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and again............................

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i should of called it look at me 20 odd times an sleep on me!!!!

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for fucks sake......... drop a link an i will reply to urs

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should of called it look at me 20 odd times an sleep on me!!!!
Could've been re-worded better..but strong message..ok vocab..

i watch through my cig smoke, using my eyes,
contemplating susicide, pondering my demise,
but from beyond what lies, death in the skies,
i've had too many tries, at a bleek, failing life,
if offered one more reprise..............
.....would i take it, or again shun evil's diguise,
false hope cries, thinking back about the lies,
i seem to realize, things that shock an surprise,
asking my self.. no replies, my mind denies,
cant do nothin as my pity multiplies......
as i near the end, my cigerette, smoke dies,

Dont do it! lol..pretty good..nice sharp..clear message,
Nice vocabulairy nice little read.. try to expand &..
advance your pieces though..but this was ok.