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Old 01-13-04, 03:04 PM   #1
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Question Logik - Droppin some freeverse- critique?

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I take you down,verbal warrior Smoke ya like a chronic pound
Mystical like morador, here to claim my logik underground
Fuck the white wizard, call me a lyrical hobbit
Destroyin your game, like knives did to john bobbit
I drop your whole crew like trumans bombs on nagasaki
I own mc's like property, while you scream "don't stock me!"
Splittin lines, my design, this devine circuit breaker
Bury your rhymes if you decline this undertaker
Tastfull like fine wine, I paralyze ya like spines
Im verbally aligned, like Jedi Mind, I shine
gangsta rappaz loose ya nines, Mainstream artists I decline
True poetic lyrical skill growin like vines
I got more game then matel, runnin through you like crisco
As I verbally Excel, I keep it tastful like Nabisco
you tryin to reach the top? you bout as high as elmo
Can I get a reply? or are you just stuck like velcro
Show me your sign, ya two facin gemeni
Keep it real, cause this calls for a written reply
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Old 01-13-04, 03:06 PM   #2
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what up... Im a new cat joinin your forums... let me know what you think... any tips, suggestions.... shit like that.... i'll be around, im also down for a battle.... My aim is Tact1kz and my email is Tact1kz@yahoo.com... so let me know what up, or PM me or some shit.... pz
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Old 01-13-04, 03:32 PM   #3
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very simple..but a decent drop..your wordplay was very~very simple..but it seemed okay!peace~
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Old 01-13-04, 04:16 PM   #4
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Yeah this was a alright piece here....structure in this was alright i thought.....you had some good flow in this as well, it stayed on point through out the whole piece....you also had some good vocab i thought too....had some alright multies....overall a alright piece, good read....keep at it.
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