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Straight Savage.
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Letter to The Worthy
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1/15/04
Dear Worthy: I am short on business, And needed to talk to Worthy Seeing as, he's the only one to me, That is understanding I may not be getting recognized, Through the other one's eyes But no one ever takes the time, Im already Generalized So I write to you in business, cuz time is the essence The message, All my writing time has been Questioned To the heart of Mines I put in the Eyes of all Yours It's all Sore, And I only end up...Behind closed doors The writing I took the Time, For others to See and not sleep Was time Wasted, And Worthy might not even read it... 'For I always write to Worthy, And He doesn't ever want to Read
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..Very short..alos..very nice...never read an bad piece from you...
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Sand
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had a semi-morbid tone to me .. this was pretty ill though, kind of a poetry level somewhat. i don't know, i liked the last line even though you had a typo .. pz
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Thanks...and up
Oh I fixed the typo there too
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Over Weight
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Nice and short..
You didn't drag out the content to long... I liked how you portayed everything.. Like Sand said..it seemed more so poetically done.. Felt it..liked the last line..what you meant..Good idea... Props...
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Guest
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yea did feel poetic but had the basis of a good peice as it did have afew nice bars
"To the heart of Mines I put in the Eyes of all Yours It's all Sore, And I only end up...Behind closed doors" ^ flowed well with the internals and had nice imagery,as a whole the peice was short and poetic but felt emotion and had a good rhyme sceme. Peace |
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Straight Savage.
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Up Up Up And Away
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Upp Agayne
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Eddy.
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Short , but a nice rhymesheme u used here, man .. good vocab usage, on the points were needed, to bad it was this short.. but it was nice man ..
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