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Old 01-15-04, 10:05 AM   #1
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Letter to The Worthy

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1/15/04

Dear Worthy:
I am short on business, And needed to talk to Worthy
Seeing as, he's the only one to me, That is understanding
I may not be getting recognized, Through the other one's eyes
But no one ever takes the time, Im already Generalized
So I write to you in business, cuz time is the essence
The message, All my writing time has been Questioned
To the heart of Mines I put in the Eyes of all Yours
It's all Sore, And I only end up...Behind closed doors
The writing I took the Time, For others to See and not sleep
Was time Wasted, And Worthy might not even read it...
'For I always write to Worthy, And He doesn't ever want to Read
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Old 01-15-04, 10:16 AM   #2
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..Very short..alos..very nice...never read an bad piece from you...
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Old 01-15-04, 10:27 AM   #3
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had a semi-morbid tone to me .. this was pretty ill though, kind of a poetry level somewhat. i don't know, i liked the last line even though you had a typo .. pz
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Old 01-15-04, 11:04 AM   #4
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Thanks...and up
Oh I fixed the typo there too
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Old 01-15-04, 11:58 AM   #5
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Nice and short..
You didn't drag out the content to long...
I liked how you portayed everything..
Like Sand said..it seemed more so poetically done..
Felt it..liked the last line..what you meant..Good idea...
Props...
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Old 01-15-04, 11:59 AM   #6
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yea did feel poetic but had the basis of a good peice as it did have afew nice bars

"To the heart of Mines I put in the Eyes of all Yours
It's all Sore, And I only end up...Behind closed doors"

^ flowed well with the internals and had nice imagery,as a whole the peice was short and poetic but felt emotion and had a good rhyme sceme.

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Old 01-15-04, 12:59 PM   #7
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Old 01-15-04, 07:13 PM   #8
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Old 01-15-04, 07:15 PM   #9
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Short , but a nice rhymesheme u used here, man .. good vocab usage, on the points were needed, to bad it was this short.. but it was nice man ..
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