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Old 01-19-04, 01:29 AM   #1
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The Truth about Oakland

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Oakland
Oakland is the city that's awake at night/ there's shooting, and stabbings, and homicides/ These people need to be stopped/ justice needs to be served/ they rob banks for lunch and slash throats for dessert./People die every night and no one's convicted of murder, and rape, and the crimes they've commited. Turn on the lights and stop the violence/ make this city echo with nothin but silence/ Stop hearin gun shots and screams for help. lets stop the madness and teach yourself, ethics and common sense to wash the blood off the hands that you rinse. No more of this deadly game. It's not any fun while you lie in your grave.
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Old 01-19-04, 01:52 AM   #2
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How do u battle?
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Old 01-19-04, 05:55 PM   #3
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I got it never mind...............................
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Old 01-21-04, 10:08 AM   #4
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The Fuck Talkin About Kidd
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Dall Wazz Happin In
I Set Up A Battle For Uss
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Old 01-21-04, 10:42 AM   #5
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..You are a disgrace to oakland..although I've never been there..I'm sure people from oak. will say the same..cause this was garbage..
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Old 01-21-04, 07:05 PM   #6
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penskills? who u need to take the green eggs and ham rap shit back and put it in the book were it came from
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Old 01-24-04, 04:35 PM   #7
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damnit would u stop with the green eggs and ham stuff. That's all you ever rap about.
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Old 01-25-04, 12:37 AM   #8
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This wasnt all that good...your structure needs work in this...do not put it in paragraph form like that...put it line on top of line because some people find it harder to read like that and it loses the flow in the piece sometimes....but keep at it.
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Old 01-26-04, 07:40 PM   #9
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ok I guess it's bad.
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Old 01-27-04, 11:46 AM   #10
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WESTSIDE!!!!!!!!Yuckmouth would be ashamed of you, well at lest u didn't go for the "i shoot people for letting they shadow get on my shoes" approach
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Old 02-02-04, 10:58 PM   #11
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any other thoughts or does it just suck?
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