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02-11-04, 05:36 PM
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I'm only 19 but I ain't getting younger
I got too much hunger now yall going under under the ground maybe everyone says I'm crazy Momma said I'm lazy ex-ladies try to blaze me But I'm colder than freezing Death is always teasing I'm glad I'm still breathing Survived stabbings, and beatings Believe it I don't think it I speak it I don't flash it I squeeze it Your approval who needs it can't flow too long I'll get sea-sick believe it I'm allergic to girls who can't stop calling You'll never catch me ballin you'll catch me robbing Without batman pitching packs man Pull through your hood in a black van seats reclined and headlights off Roll down the window Then your head flies off Believe it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!  |
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02-11-04, 05:38 PM
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WOW,I'm new to,but you being nineteen and all.This was not good
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02-11-04, 05:42 PM
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Go to garage...
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02-11-04, 05:46 PM
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well well well yall gonna diss me obviously because I am not like you or like the dicks you usually ride, but try to understand my perception and stop being closed minded or we will all sound the same. Stop having a criteria for talent and open your mind. Thanks for the replies anyway
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02-11-04, 11:25 PM
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Ignore Freeman - that's his standard greeting to posters who aren't telling stories. Some nice lines there and a good understanding of how to rhyme. Keep the hunger - you should have continued your form that you started with instead of closing with the gangsta stuff. Top 2/3 is alright - bottom third just doesn't go with what you started. Keep writing. Hit my "Broken Metamorphosis" if you can.
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02-11-04, 11:51 PM
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this was completely whack...
nothing good about this wow your words rhyme... anywon can rhyme... lmao, you need a topic... or battle someone, show us that you have talent, to flow about anything not just packin gats and rollin dubs... which these people w ho talk about it dont do...
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02-12-04, 12:12 AM
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"this was completely whack...
nothing good about this wow your words rhyme... anywon can rhyme... lmao, you need a topic..." I meant his scheme - it was quite compact - and it takes at least some skill to keep rhyming when your lines are short like that. "can't flow too long I'll get sea-sick" Thought that and a few other lines were alright. Anyway he's just starting so he needs advice. |
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