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02-15-04, 05:16 AM | #1 | ||
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multi talented
IP:
this is basically multies aight peep
i'm so hazardous-i could slap you bastards-backwards so fast-that you faggots-couldn't fathom-the fact-that-the action-acually happened and it just so happens-i happen-to have-gat-in my jacket match with-a magnum-to blast in-any cat-who crosses past-my path and it's certain-i've heard-some words-that'll make me dispurse some curses-that hurt-worse-than a virgins-first-time twurkin-a person i'm sick cause i'm workin-by incertin-nurses-in the back of some black hurses-and lurkin-and jerkin-purses-for a purpose-that seems worth it- which is my enterprise-which risin-so high- over the horrizon-that no guy- can fly over my sky risers- and if they try- i'll strike 'em-with lightin from a triton- like zeus or possiedon- after fightin some of the titatins which leads me back-to my battle rap-tactics i use to attack rappers-and abuse rap fanatics and confuse like mathematics- to fuse my rap status- which i can't lose like bad habbits- but can bruise like the ass of faggots who wants it who has it-who's the baddest rapper at this i'm the baddest rapper rappin-this thread prooves i'm the baddest one
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02-15-04, 05:27 AM | #2 | ||
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IP:
soundz like someone just got finished listening to "So Sick"...but this piece was straight...some of the multiz were good...although I feel that you kinda lost ya flow in some parts...and work on ya structure...it makez the verse a WHOLE lot easier for otherz to read when it's in good structural form...and this ain't really had a concept or story behind it...but then again...it wasn't supposed to...so it's good for what it was...peep my open mic when you get a chance...it's called "Tortured Wordz" I think...I just thought of a quick title for it that soundz intellectual...lol...holla...
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02-15-04, 05:48 AM | #3 | ||
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IP:
good lookin on the reply gun and i'll peep ya shit
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shut the fuck up even if i stutter i'll still sh-sh-shit on you/ pun dead in middle of little of little italy little did we know that we riddle some middle man who didn't do ditally/ pun |
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02-15-04, 06:35 AM | #4 | ||
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IP:
i thought this was decent in some ways, thought the multis seemed a bit overused and so lost the flow, no need to highlight them either... i would take a few out, build in the scheme a bit.... and even the syllables out in places... but not bad.... keep at it...
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02-15-04, 07:18 AM | #5 | |
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IP:
nice piece.....flow was choppy in places but for a multie piece it was cool....sr8 drop
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02-15-04, 11:16 AM | #6 | ||
Flyweight
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IP:
good lookin on the replies
still uppin
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shut the fuck up even if i stutter i'll still sh-sh-shit on you/ pun dead in middle of little of little italy little did we know that we riddle some middle man who didn't do ditally/ pun |
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02-16-04, 02:32 PM | #7 | ||
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IP:
uppin for more
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shut the fuck up even if i stutter i'll still sh-sh-shit on you/ pun dead in middle of little of little italy little did we know that we riddle some middle man who didn't do ditally/ pun |
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02-16-04, 03:43 PM | #8 | ||
Eddy.
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IP:
-t-t-t-t-t-t-t- dsnt make multis.
Im not even reading it, .. its wack writing with thousands of ----- in a verse,
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02-16-04, 03:50 PM | #9 | ||
Sane Scientist
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IP:
Ok good multies however you lacked vocabulary …
Work on vocabulary and structure other then that The multies did work… peace |
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02-17-04, 03:16 PM | #10 | ||
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IP:
like i've said to many other fuckin retards if you're not gonna read the shit and come with replies or crit then shut the fuck up oh yea i don't give a fuck who you might in that case either
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02-17-04, 07:56 PM | #11 | |||
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IP:
nice post decent multis needs better vocab other than that this shit was nice do some more man i'd like to see more from ya man.
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