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This is my first post!
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"Only God Can Judge Me"
Don't know me can't judge me don't know what type of shit i had to go through take you through a flash back and force you to do things people made me do. Can't even find a real man always been forced into everything. Regent was a mistake disrespected n beaton my life was on the stake. I don't want to deal with this shit forget about living i feel like cutting my wrists now, don't even wanna listen. All my life ive been living through hell so i know ill be going to heaven pop 1 pop 2 fuck it pop 7 no stopping me hope once its done all of u will see how much u dont know me and only god can judge me.... Feed back please
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"I've Been Through Enough In Life To Know What It's Really Like, To Realize What Significance Some Things Have, But Sometimes I Just Can't Face It For What Its Really Worth...As If I'm Lying To Myself Because I'm Afraid Of It "
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This was a good piece, needs work but for a first piece definitly decent. I think you should make it bigger give the reader more of a visual of situations you've been through. the emotion was good but could use some metaphores and such. keep writting and elavating i'll be looking at more from you. peace
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Format is complicated but it's ok. Keep it up.
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