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04-24-04, 11:44 AM
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[B]BLOOD, SWEAT, and TEARS[/B]
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i wrote this in class today holla bak
I run it in rap, and have to show-no-fears// but cant hide the fact my pillow is soaked-with-TEARS// hold my head above, trying not to sink-in-da-mud// spit my heart and replace ink-with-BLOOD// spit half of my life, and expose-da-rest// all to get dem dollars soaked-in-SWEAT// the BLOOD, the SWEAT, the TEARS, i put in the pot*// all to bluff or fold on a hand i thought was hot// but if u play ur cards rite, u can pull a full house// throughout, a long life where quittin is ruled out// FIGHT FIRE wit WATER nigga and play da game smart// build up pounds of courage, and TONS of heart// prepare for the worse and hope for the best// and follow the pounding inside of ya chest// FEAR NO MAN, equality is the worlds downfall// but i'm of higher man and i wear the crown yall//////// pot* the pot is where the money from bets goes in during a poker game
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ya numba done came// and crumbled ya fame// into a ball' a umbrulla disolves into flames// u under my REIGN//-Royce da 5'9'' why do it// knowin u can light my saliva like lighta fluid//-Royce da 5'9''
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04-24-04, 12:21 PM
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#2
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IP:
Yo Lemme Get Some Feedback Yall Come On
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ya numba done came// and crumbled ya fame// into a ball' a umbrulla disolves into flames// u under my REIGN//-Royce da 5'9'' why do it// knowin u can light my saliva like lighta fluid//-Royce da 5'9''
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04-24-04, 02:05 PM
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#3
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IP:
man that ish was hot, yo!!! keep rapin!!!! HOLLA BACK
AIM: PhatFarmers17 YAHOO: Niggaryder425 |
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04-24-04, 02:35 PM
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#4
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IP:
Nice piece man i liked the flow of it. Rhymes were basic though
my favorite lines were FIGHT FIRE wit WATER nigga and play da game smart// build up pounds of courage, and TONS of heart// n hold my head above, trying not to sink-in-da-mud// spit my heart and replace ink-with-BLOOD// In my opinion you need to up ya vocab and use more wordplay etc. because a piece like this needs some peace -TiK-
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04-24-04, 03:28 PM
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#5
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Flyweight
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IP:
that shit that you just spit my nigga was fire be on the look out for more posts......1
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hey yo im known to play it low// dont confuse me with these cornballs on the radio// ima true hustlah you couldnt fit in my shoes// my pager buzz to much man my hips are bruised// faMBa$e Bitch ass niggas Bean Town thats how im doing it....enjoy life make money.....death b4 dishonor trust no body that aint your fam and fuck that you cant even trust them some times i cant even trust myself lil niggas.....1 |
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04-24-04, 06:09 PM
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#6
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Flyweight
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IP:
Nice flow....one rhyme scheme though so it was quite basic. You have skills but challenge yourself a bit more.
Reply to mine now http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=120515
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04-24-04, 07:31 PM
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#7
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IP:
aight i was really feelin this shit...it was on point especially these begiinnin bars....
I run it in rap, and have to show-no-fears// but cant hide the fact my pillow is soaked-with-TEARS// hold my head above, trying not to sink-in-da-mud// spit my heart and replace ink-with-BLOOD// spit half of my life, and expose-da-rest// all to get dem dollars soaked-in-SWEAT// the rest was hot too man keep doin you playa shits real ill ~UnO~
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04-24-04, 09:54 PM
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Flyweight
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IP:
yo i need more feedbak
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ya numba done came// and crumbled ya fame// into a ball' a umbrulla disolves into flames// u under my REIGN//-Royce da 5'9'' why do it// knowin u can light my saliva like lighta fluid//-Royce da 5'9''
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04-24-04, 10:08 PM
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The Topical Juggernaut
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IP:
Ill shit cat keep it up. Up the vocab, keep droppin~
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Crhyme Sindicate  The unexamined life is not worth living.
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04-25-04, 02:44 PM
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IP:
yo more feedback...
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ya numba done came// and crumbled ya fame// into a ball' a umbrulla disolves into flames// u under my REIGN//-Royce da 5'9'' why do it// knowin u can light my saliva like lighta fluid//-Royce da 5'9''
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04-25-04, 05:37 PM
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#11
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IP:
dats some good shit my nigga , we should battle sometime.
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04-26-04, 12:15 PM
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#12
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Flyweight
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IP:
yo i need more feedback drop ur link and i'll leave u some to juss hit me bak.
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ya numba done came// and crumbled ya fame// into a ball' a umbrulla disolves into flames// u under my REIGN//-Royce da 5'9'' why do it// knowin u can light my saliva like lighta fluid//-Royce da 5'9''
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04-26-04, 06:18 PM
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#13
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Flyweight
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IP:
yo i need some more feedback yall come o, drop some links or open mic titles and i'll hit u up also.
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ya numba done came// and crumbled ya fame// into a ball' a umbrulla disolves into flames// u under my REIGN//-Royce da 5'9'' why do it// knowin u can light my saliva like lighta fluid//-Royce da 5'9''
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04-26-04, 06:53 PM
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#14
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Banned: Biting OM
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IP:
this is good dawg...i could actually feel it..keep it up dawg
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04-27-04, 01:31 PM
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#15
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Umm...Yeah
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IP:
that was real nice, nice everthing flow is nice
lyrics is nice |
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