HooK
i'm gonna ride~down wit u//
i'm gonna shine~bright u threw//
they claim that hope is all do//
they shamed my name~yet still i'm koo//
fuck skoolz~fools tooled in proof the puddin cum from the truth//

Verse 1
kill mah world on mah shine~marry the devil~sell mah soul for a dime//
hope an postin on pride~gloatin u die~gonna fry~alotta die u gonna cry//
i brush pas so fas like loosin cash bring a tear to eye~confide entwine divide the line between poor an devine~mah two ego's collide~wen the collide the world awaits awaitin a betta time//
unkind shit wieghs like a ton~prodical son~logical~wen it cums to poppin mah gun~see u run think it fun till i shot twice~once maybe once more to much~u gone lites out lifes out~u bitch admit u dun//
mos the crews trippin spittin enrichen themselfs suckin cock like a trick~i'm lookin for forma fun maybe into familly till den~the self scum form ov a thug//
progressed mah shootin form i ain't bother no mo wit a gun~piss me off~giv mah dick a quick tugg~u jus drowned in yah hood~covered in spunk//
mah shit stinks i think the devil incorparated rap~jonny rotton got maki bumpin out punk//
bang bang bang mother fucka fuck hang hang hang mutha fucka suk man man man man mutha fucka use yah hand motha fucka u ain't pissin but tossin me off its all wank looka half the crews strikin wit der fam hambags//
while ur momma dinna tits sag~i say fuck that~fuck that hag i had turned round words found reason to meanin~screamin bitch u like that//
but she ain't awake~an she don't though this ma dick she can taste~like me to u lryically~physically get raped//


short spit

whats tha verdict need tha ppl for the comments

u should write in bars its easier to read. that was aight the hook needs some work u should up on ya vocab n find better ways to word ya lines n work on ya structure but it was aight

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beezy crew fo life
1 love live life
2 the fullest

HOLLA @YA GIRL

beezy crew from life to death
n when I die put the colors across my chest

yea it was hard to read and it needed some work but overall not to bad iight keep elecvatin...........

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it was igth nice job

ayo dat was nice namean? sum work needed but yo errbody need a lil work.. so was up u think maybe u wanna be down wit NDOT? we ill for real dawg... i'll take that as ya try owt n u prolly in... jus say tha word

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im feeln it, shiet if i had a good rap crew ritte now, i'd probley give u a chance, aright tho, peace.