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newbie trying ta make a name...
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imma drop some shit to get critiqued...hit up on it...
let it be known, my tempers shorter than al capone/ im rockin' the zone, while ya'll niggas is pickin on bones/ yo shits blown/ like a speaker bitch when i penetrate/ make ya'll bitches wanna try, but just couldnt relate/ im in a whole nother state/ when im rockin the mic, these fake ass bitches sock it to me but i keep this shit tight/ i shine bright, admist the night/ with might, i crack your eardrum/ yo shit it sounds dumb/ i'll let the Cali Agents spit it, "neva forget where you came from"/ with these drums i make sound/ and with these thoughts i manifest/ i spit it loud and obnoxious, to bound and strike the hearts of the deaf/ with no contest/ i stand ecstatically/ the master of this galaxy/ while hip-hops bleedin the truth, industry niggas is stabbin with fallacy, its maddening/ a bit short but fuck... hit up on this shit...need some feedback...the truth never hurts...peace ![]()
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I think you show real potential, but you have to work on your rhyme structure- that way anyone can read it to a beat. Your wordplay is decent but you need to incorporate more punchlines...all in all I say Keep elevatin cuz your on your way to nasty.
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IP:
that was pretty good for one of your first posts, try to up your game though
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IP:
much thanx...learnin' shit...
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(00)O=(00) <-- I will knock you the fuck out........
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i wasnt feelin ti to much but it wasnt to badd keep elevatin iight.........................................
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