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05-18-04, 02:18 PM | #1 | ||
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What have I don to deserve this? [FEEDBACK NEEDED]
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All the neon lights are shining brightly//
I press my head on ur chest..very lightly// I hear ur heart beating// Getting flashbacks of our first meeeting// in the park// In the dark// all alone baby Tell me why u had to go// And leave me so....y? [hook] Leave me on ma own on the floor stone called in my home not bein able to even reach the phone to call u and still say that I care I wana do anything just to make it fair Oh Baby, What have I done to deserve this? It musta been love// Cos I remebered our first kiss// And that kiss lingers and that I really miss// I try and get u back but u n ya mates take the piss// Why does it have to be like this?// I wana hold u there forever baby// why why why? Tell me sumink new not " This is why I dumped u" Tell me sumink true... Cos u know im true to u// So please be true to me.....forever baby....please Cos I need somebody// I wana feel some1 close to me// Tell me baby please...... COs I want u, Want u............... [Hook]...Till fade
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05-21-04, 10:33 AM | #2 | ||
ROFL @ u niggas since '04
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IP:
could be a straight song, Im not sure how the hook goes. U'd also prabably need a male rapper,or Thug, such as for say, Me, Cannibus, or Chino Xl, to balance it and keep it from ramboling on. U also would have to make the first verse a little longer.all in all, sounds like it could be a good song if u stoped the whinnin' and add one more verse for lentgh and closure.
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05-21-04, 11:47 AM | #3 | ||
(00)O=(00) <-- I will knock you the fuck out........
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IP:
its a strait song baby....much love keep it comin but yea i would try to pull in a rapper to top it off with a guy part
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05-31-04, 10:24 AM | #4 | ||
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IP:
kk thanks babe
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05-31-04, 10:29 AM | #5 | ||
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IP:
Shit was str8 baby...keep it up..
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05-31-04, 10:38 AM | #6 | ||
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IP:
hehe, thanks hun
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05-31-04, 10:39 AM | #7 | ||
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IP:
shit dis thang was old neways
uppin ..........
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