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07-13-04, 07:26 PM | #1 | ||
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Hip-Hop Deliverin Spirit
IP:
Im pretty new so plz give me feed bak. i need a crew so if u like me send me a msg. hope u like it.
My microphone has grown out of my wristbone/ I've lost control of my vocal tone, spitting this shit chromed/ I'm possesed by hip-hop delivering spirit/ I fear it because my hand is constantly scribbling lyrics/ I can't eat, or even sleep in my bed/ Tormented because a beat will always creep in my head/ I can't listen to a drum loop without timing it/ Can't hold a conversation without rhyming it/ I walk down the street and my brain's known to rattle/ Because I'm thirsty as hell for a mother fucking battle/ I have no TV, already broke it in three/ Because I turn it on to see another whack mc/ I have lyrics in my head, they always stop and then go/ I constantly daydream about rocking a show/ Write my rhymes all my life as it begins and ends/ Broke as fuck cause I'm always out purchasing pens/ |
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07-13-04, 09:12 PM | #2 | ||
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IP:
U had some nice lines in there. "Write my rhymes all my life as it begins and ends/
Broke as fuck cause I'm always out purchasing pens/" or "I'm possesed by hip-hop delivering spirit/I fear it because my hand is constantly scribbling lyrics/" thos were nice dawg.But try and use more vocab. try to paint a verbal picture or else peeps wont wanna read. BUT NICE 1ST POST. HOLLA!!!!! Prephix. ...............ahhhhahhhh!
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this is Prephix the Prehistorical Scribe, Reppin UndeRgroundSoutH: Mistah _Tate aka A-train Prephix aka Prehistorical Scribe Inn Deppth check us out ya'll! Peace, and wun! Prephix. ..................ahhhhahhhhhh!! |
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07-13-04, 09:16 PM | #3 | ||
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IP:
hey yo prephix can i join ur crew? i will go all out and that was 1 of my weak rymes. i have a much bigger vocab and trust me i use it. so what u think. hit me bak.
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07-13-04, 10:33 PM | #4 | ||
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IP:
hey can i get sum more feedbak plz. maybe u can rate it. i dont care just gimme feedbak.
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