|
|
|
|
| Phenom | Kingz | Dabatos | TonySelf | Tha Q | Half Breed | Tito | 7th End | RV Radio  |
|
|
07-22-04, 07:01 PM
|
#1
|
||
|
New to RB
|
Please give me feedback
IP:
Yo gimme some feedback,
OrientalDun Yeah I'm new and just marinatining like a steak I don't fake like an actor I stay fresh like a COKE I like to joke around from Jersey but now in VA Every day just writing some raps I'm chilling like a frezzer Don't play checkers like and old gezzer I rhyme cause its in my blood I stay cold like a BUDWISER Like a geyser I just let out my steam in my sprays I'm crispy like a bag of LAYS I eat a lot of rice I need some rapping advice I just trying to show and prove I could rhyme I'm sometimes slipping but I ain't tripping time Goes by fast like a corvette my spits are straight phat In the past there were the best rap records around, drat Like the cicadas there Barley anymore great rappers Just as PC data slips away cause some hackers All these fakes on T.V. are slackers They ain't real how they get a deal? I wish Jay-Z wasn't retiring the head CEOS should be firing chingy I dish crazy rhymes like a waiter I kill like the TERMINATOR Just tell me If its okay or whatever |
||
|
|
07-22-04, 07:18 PM
|
#2
|
||
|
[DeaTh-Is-NeaR!-]
|
IP:
uhh lol welcome and work on ur rhymes more aiight?
lol
__________________
|
||
|
|
|
07-22-04, 10:39 PM
|
#3
|
|
|
This is my first post!
|
you suck
IP:
 [QUOTE=OrientalDun]Yo gimme some feedback,OrientalDun Yeah I'm new and just marinatining like a steak I don't fake like an actor I stay fresh like a COKE I like to joke around from Jersey but now in VA Every day just writing some raps I'm chilling like a frezzer Don't play checkers like and old gezzer I rhyme cause its in my blood I stay cold like a BUDWISER Like a geyser I just let out my steam in my sprays I'm crispy like a bag of LAYS I eat a lot of rice I need some rapping advice I just trying to show and prove I could rhyme I'm sometimes slipping but I ain't tripping time Goes by fast like a corvette my spits are straight phat In the past there were the best rap records around, drat Like the cicadas there Barley anymore great rappers Just as PC data slips away cause some hackers All these fakes on T.V. are slackers They ain't real how they get a deal? I wish Jay-Z wasn't retiring the head CEOS should be firing chingy I dish crazy rhymes like a waiter I kill like the TERMINATOR Just tell me If its okay or whatever[/QUOTE] |
|
|
|
|
07-22-04, 10:40 PM
|
#4
|
|
|
This is my first post!
|
IP:
i think ur rhymes are wack/
and ur flow is corny/ ur mom makes me horny/ |
|
|
|
|
07-22-04, 10:56 PM
|
#5
|
|
|
Doesn't Belong Here.
|
IP:
^ Someone sign this kid.
__________________
Sigs are for narks. |
|
|
|
|
07-23-04, 02:31 PM
|
#6
|
||
|
New to RB
|
Aiiyo Triskut
IP:
Yeah whatever dude at least my name ain't fucking Triskut
Man Your named after a cracker, eat you like a biscut For breakfast, ur working for Nabisco dum shit Yeah my damn flow is fluid as Crisco dumb fool Your spits small like you dick lick my TRISCUIT The rhymes you spray is easy like your mom My spits are like a bomb there exploding with rhymes my sprays tight like a car dude yo mom is a bed, guys get on top of her, right  |
||
|
|
|
07-23-04, 02:59 PM
|
#7
|
|
|
New to RB
|
IP:
aiight take this shit to Front Lines...but welcome welcome stay active and bring heads
__________________
<center>..::||TekNeks||::.. ..::iLLNess~At~All~TimeS::.. <marquee>MoreLess ya Fake in Existants like ADAM being GAY...your just Prone to Swallowing Fruit by the ROOT~/~</marquee> |
|
|
|
|
07-23-04, 03:01 PM
|
#8
|
|
|
Umm...Yeah
|
IP:
wow herby galore and I thought I sucked muahahahahahahhahaha
__________________
|
|
|
|
 |
| Thread Tools | Search this Thread |
| Display Modes | |
|
|
Hybrid Mode
