10 lines
no hate
no dr
no crew
15 minute limit after both MC check in.

let do dis checkin in

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verses due at 6pm. checkin in.

6pm tommorow?

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today preferrably. I'll give you another 7 minutes.

I'ma set it off like my girl Jada Pinkett
you stealin gems off da tables
when I'm droppin these trinketts
switch my style up, like Posada for the Yankees
you a shell of a man, plus ya structure's janky
reload my magazine, hit da danky danky
fingerfuck the pump, some automatic hanky panky
ya cerebral cortex is stuck up in my vortex
whore sex, more bets, shore up Dex'
before my teks get at ya neck, leave u wrexxed from my effects

good luck to golden shellz

i checked his inventory it says hes gotta switchblade
probably like kanye in his momz house thinkin he got it made
i bet this niggas a pussy, wit tyra banks up on da runway
he's like da daily news, u get tha most out of him on sundays
i see u 1-1 well golden is a rude shock
fuck around ill get u smacked back to da boondocks.
i gotta text battle cuz ya audio's too wack 4 me to listen (to)
i would call u gay but even that wouldnt fit the description.
save ya fuckin lines u could keep that 4 marriage
if winning was ur baby u jus had a miscarriage.

[switchblade in inventory]
wen ur pregnant u expect a baby, wen u battle u expect to win, so if "winning was a baby u jus had a miscarriage"

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Punches: Golden Shellz
Flow: Tie
Metaz: Golden Shellz
Originality: Niether
Wordplay: Golden Shellz...

Final Vote..... Golden Shellz

Not your best battle kizza....

http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=136693 <- both peep n vote fairly....

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Alright weak battle:Keep Elevatin:
kizza:ur verse could have been better, u need to work on ya flow and structure, you were saying things in ya verse that didnt make sense and were off the topic of trying to battle your opponent, you used filler lines when u could have been using personals, wordplay, and u really had no strong punches there, need to come harder next time, this is not hate, just honest feedback.......1
goldenk, ur verse was better, you had stronger punches and better overall flow and structure than kizza, liked the twist in ur last line, nice, u dissed him in ur verse and this is what a battle is supposed to be,keep doin this and use more personals,this would polish ur skills.............
VOTE:GOLDEN SHELLZ

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uppin dis fa more votes ya'll!

uppin' for votes!!!!!!!!

kizza this battle was a even one. you need harder punches. golden shellz was harder. my vote is on gold sry kiz but im being honest.

Vote goldshellz

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation.

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kIZZA'S VERSE WAS NOTHING GOOD. STRUCTURE NEED WORK, AND SOME OF THE SHIT U WERE SAYIN DIDN'T EVEN SEEM LIKE BATTLE TYPE SHIT.

sHELLZ: GOOD PUNCHES, NICE FLOWING VERSE


vOTE: sHELLZ

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Ya BiTch FA ShO!

K ya structure was a lil to stretched out you had some good punches but not strong enough
shellz you had some nice punches the structure was a lil choppy but it worked for you here
a lil more meta's and personals needed

vote
Shellz

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