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07-24-04, 07:06 PM
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Regret
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Regret You`re probably wondering why I`m sitting here crying. Well, while you think about life, I think about dying. While you plan for your tomorrows, I`m frightened about what lies ahead. You`ll go on living, but I`ll soon be dead. While you were out playing, I was out doing drugs. While you were in school, I was getting knocked up. While you were getting married, I was tested for HIV. When you said "I do", I said "Why me?"" You say you have no regrets while I have so many. At your funeral there`ll be mourning, at mine there won`t be any. So now I think about my past, careless mistakes. Dear God what a shame, I couldn`t see what was at stake. They say you regret nothing till Death comes knocking. I would`ve lived a clean life if I knew this was coming. So now you know why I`m sitting here crying. I`ve lived a shameful life, and now I am dying.
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07-25-04, 05:35 PM
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IP:
Mafia Chick, this was really good. I liked reading it. The writing was very simple and to the point but had good meaning in it, at least to me. I enjoyed how you compared 2 peoples lives together, one being a good life, and the other being not so good. Some writings don't really have any feeling to them, or emotion I guess you could say. This one had plenty. Makes me think either you been in this situation or seen it up close. All I can say is keep your head up and continue writing.
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07-25-04, 09:09 PM
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IP:
yo thats offical but is it factual or metaphorical?
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07-25-04, 10:33 PM
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IP:
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its metaphorical
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07-25-04, 10:41 PM
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IP:
that was sick, nice way getting ya point across ya thought well put down the creativeness u had made the story alot better to read the whole lay-out the real life thought u put down was like WOW u had made time to really think about this one huh?? but i loved this one alot nicely done....
9.5 outta 10 keep droping them.... are u a poet or just a rhymer who just thought of this idea and had a real impact on thoughts that u wrote... |
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07-26-04, 12:48 AM
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IP:
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thanks and yeah i really thought this one thur i just write shyt that come to mind thats all
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07-26-04, 02:30 AM
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Light Weight
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IP:
damn kidd dat was hott..most definatley feelin that drop...very simple and to da point
keep dat shyt comin iight peace |
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07-27-04, 02:05 PM
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IP:
yeah mos def
thankz
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