Dream's Shattered And all the whole world is Fightin'
Notta damn soul beleieves In me, Im not the one to "confide"In'
All my life I have been lied to and needed to be hidin'
Just to realize, That this mic Is the answer to stop kids committ'n suicide'N
All type's Of violence, Emotional physical and the one noone decides'It'
If u had a verse and lyrical imagination like me Would u hide it?
At first I did',eventually noticing I was the reason Kids quit gettin'violent'
Stoppin'Traffic' Noticing noone was doing exactly what I did'

Gettin exicted' Guns blastin Shattering glass like loose'panel's
I'm a canibal' Rippen' through your lyrics like flesh'The new-hannibal'
I know Its unImaginable' But damn Im your worst'Naturalist'
Ventin' Coolin off Hit the bag b4 I get the hang of'it
Just one crazy kid'Not knowin' who his "real" family'is
By blood'yes, But by affiliation' Its the new and improved wreck'manifest'
It's a mistake to aim-vest' I destroy you wanna'bes, and murk all the-rest'
Hate to be the one to "test" the new'vest'Cuz
All I ever wanted to be Loved and get a few'hug's An'I
Needa true heart' tender in prosperation' Noone will ever fill this lane'Of'pavement' Cuz'I
Needed a friend', N'I Needed' a dream' Always Pictured a hot-lady-2-cream'
So' I ended' the strife'3 day's B4 I wanted 2 end'My whole'life'
But damn it felt so right' Barrel 2 my head' and I pretendin' 2 "hold"tight'

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Gimme some feed

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wut up this was a pretty nice ass... drop froma new comer nice job...i really liked your wordplay..and you feelins... your emotions ...were really good..and i liked the way you described your situation..you had some nice structure ...but i think you shouldnt do those ' '' things they make your verse to crampt up..its not a battle verse... but overall nice drop..and keep it up...7.5/10

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Thnx fer feed UPPIN for feedback

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i was feeling that, u had good wordplay, pretty nice structure, and u really got in touch with the situation, i think this was also good to me because i lost a loved one to suicide. Good shit keep it coming. 9/10

uppin for feed'

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Man, notta damn soul gives feed around here.....

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shit was hot nice drop good flow and creative was good,
all around not bad...

8.0

V.T

* where u been nigga go to the check-ins *

dect verse not bad honestly not so good either but good for you for sharing it
i like the title, u can do a hot hook wit it
holla at me for the remix LOL

upp'in this

ay man that was pretty nice.i liked tha whole concept of it and u had some good wordplay. ya flow was alright i think it woulda been better with a hook on it and if u made it a lil longer but overall it was good. 7.5/10

uppin 4 feed

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um nice but could use some work... return da favor wit my battles or open mics...

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Uppin 4 feed

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gimme sum feed

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